Love, Sadistic

Love, Sadistic

A Poem by Carbon Muse
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When love clouds your judgement such, that it takes a stranger to open your eyes...

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I watched you smiling, laughing

Her hand resting on your thigh

I watched her teasing, flirting

As your hand creeped up her side

 

Do I matter to you, the way you do

Have I such a desperate heart

That I’d swallow the pain, you put me through

Out of fear that our paths might part

 

I watched you whisper, smelling her hair

Her hand now stroking your leg

I watched her blush and bite her lip

As your hand reached up to her neck

 

Where is my pride, my self respect

Maybe I’m just over reacting

Is it worth turning this, into a lover's tiff

Am I the only one finding this offending

 

As her shoulder strap fell, so did his fist

Lifting you clean out of the chair

With a curt little nod, he grabbed her wrist

As he generously paid for my fair

 

With a bloodied smile, bemused by your tryst

You reached out your hand for me to assist

My hand you did find, like a quaint little kiss

To that bloodied cheek, that grin no longer shared

 

Indignant you screamed, you yelled out my name

Hoard me to the world and brought me to shame

Yet it bothered me none, for my eyes finally saw

That my bleeding heart, had been fatally flawed

 

If not for the kindness of the stranger that night

What would have become, would I have seen the light

I fear had I not, I’d be another statistic

Of relationships teetering on the brink of sadistic

© 2015 Carbon Muse


Author's Note

Carbon Muse
Next time you see a woman in distress and you think, "Well why don't you just leave him you stupid woman!" Take a deep breath, and think of all the stupid things you have done for the sake of love...

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Whoa.
At first I am uncomfortable with what I see developing between the two, then am relieved by her rescue and by the clear view of things that you, as the narrator/observer derive as a result of the interaction she observes.
I think the person who resorts to violence against another reveals a distinct depravity of intelligence

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DirectTangent

4 Years Ago

I don't know if it has any value in saying but too often, it seems to me, women caught in similar si.. read more
surfingdragoncat

4 Years Ago

sorry for jumping in. Great poem, great follow up. interesting thing to note though, there is a doub.. read more
Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your insights and yes, the shoe can so easily be on the other foot. Through all the h.. read more



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Wow. That was deep. A poem that gives a clear view about how things tend to work out in a ill afflicted relationship. This was a really powerful piece. Great job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you ^_^
The poem is a perfect portrayal of an abusive relationship. I call it abusive as the loved one is totally insensitive to the hurt he is causing so casually and callously. Every emotion of pain and betrayal comes through effectively here. A great read again.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

You are absolutely right in calling it abusive ... There's more than one form of abuse and at times.. read more
DIVYA

4 Years Ago

You are welcome. It is a pleasure.
Your imagery is exciting and vibrant. Good write. Thanks for sharing this piece.

~Rob~

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it so and thank you for reading!
Great poem, great follow up. interesting thing to note though, there is a double edged sword. The woman who was flirting with the man. "women" in this situation could easily apply to a man. This feeling of despair, why didn't i see through it, seems to be just a human condition of trusting, or wanting to trust, in the good in people. Wanting to feel like someone special. Love is blind, as was said. Realizing your trust and love is misplaced is one of the scariest things ever because it is losing trust in the other person who you care about... but more importantly in your own decision on who to love. Will you find love again if you can't trust your own judgment? that fear is what really drives it, which this poem captures perfectly!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the compliment and great insights ... oh so true. At the core, we are selfish beings .. read more
Oh how like moths we are to love's flame at times......and then we do it again and again.

Stirring writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you!

One can almost say that LOVE is in fact the true defenition of insanity read more
Whoa.
At first I am uncomfortable with what I see developing between the two, then am relieved by her rescue and by the clear view of things that you, as the narrator/observer derive as a result of the interaction she observes.
I think the person who resorts to violence against another reveals a distinct depravity of intelligence

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DirectTangent

4 Years Ago

I don't know if it has any value in saying but too often, it seems to me, women caught in similar si.. read more
surfingdragoncat

4 Years Ago

sorry for jumping in. Great poem, great follow up. interesting thing to note though, there is a doub.. read more
Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your insights and yes, the shoe can so easily be on the other foot. Through all the h.. read more
Very dark poem with various deep-though themes. Well written. I just love this. You really deserve full score

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you so much, I can't say how flattered I am that you liked it so much.

Th.. read more
There's a lot of character in what youve captured. Sometimes blind love isn't a good thing and you've penned that perfectly. I like the flow and rhythm too.
bill

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carbon Muse

4 Years Ago

Thank you!

That is so true ...

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Added on November 6, 2015
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Tags: Love, Betrayal, Awakening, Sadistic

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