A walk home

Inspiration hit me while I was walking home...by myself one day. Don't read if u expect a happy ending...

A gentle caress across my skin

Turns into a fierce cold slap.

The sky cries slowly, peacefully

But then it turns angry, lighting the sky.

Chest heaving, holding myself tight

Tears mix with rain in this endless night.

 

Feet sloshing in pools of my tears

Hair whipping my face, harder each time.

My skin shivers and my soul quivers;

In the harshness of winds arms

Trees screaming defiance, and loss

I’m sobbing with remorse

 

I walk the cemented pavement

And then come across a fork in the road

Blindly I choose the one in the trees,

And walk solely on my own

I can not see cars rushing by, only two headlights

Directly in front of my teary eyes

 

And I’m gone…

Too late for choosing this path in my life.

 

 

Author's Note

Thnks for the review! I hope it gave you something to think about...ingnore grammatical errors.

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

I never read a poem like this as one has fictionally ended ones life by choosing the wrong path. Sadly in the "Real World" people do this every single day. i enjoyed the write it has depth, flow and staying power! Great Write!

[Stephie204]

its very emotional and sad but is well written. good job.

[deeps]

Wonderful write full of emotion
It's quite sad really.
Well written, flowed nicely

[BABSIE BEE]

Well written and full of different emotions. A sad ending...but glad you,re not really gone..tee hee !!!
Thanks for sharing
Take care
Babsie Bee xx

[Call me Jane]

this is sad but really good
Well done! XD

[Serend1p1ty]

Heeeeavy..
It's sad, but it fits the rainy weather sorta day.
The ending is well done & yeah, from a writer's point of view, it's a well done work of art.
But as a person, rather depressing haha.
Good work!

Yours truly,
cloud6

[KimmiChristine(:]

Wooaaa. Blown away :] I hope your not actually feeling this cuz then I'd have to give you a big hug at school in front of everybody >:[ But really that was great, Very well put together and it has kinda a misty mysterious feel about it, LOVE IT
Peace :]