I left a lady crying..

I left a lady crying..

A Poem by Coyote Poetry
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   I left a lady crying



Lady true lay down alone in a cold bed.
Words of love left her upside down and alone.
She ransomed her heart for a endearing love and
she wanted to devour love with all her heart and soul.

I left a lady crying,
I left a lady falling and dying.

I gave enough to inflame her heart and I took what he needed.
I left her weeping.

Lady blue, lady true dwell in sorrow.
She bared her heart and she knew.
Love is game of chance.
Better to nourish the want of love than
never know the sweet kiss and the kind embrace.

I asked her twice.
“Can you forgive me?
Lady true told him.
Men who steal and run.
He will learn,
he left a woman waiting,
he broke her heart and he didn’t care.
Karma is a fair judge my love.
You will miss me and I will forget you”

Men who dance in peril and live in the maze of lies and greed.
Will dream of their Lady true and never know real peace again.


Coyote/John Castellenas

© 2020 Coyote Poetry


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yep ... what goes around comes around ... though your antagonist is callous in love in this instance ... pain will no doubt visit him ... if that doesn't soften and teach his heart .. i'm afraid he may never have love at all ... live in the Peter Pan syndrome forever :( if you take another look and read for syntax errors i think it will make this very emotive piece better ... readers stumble over "...She ransom.." (should be ransomed) or ".... enough to inflamed..." (should be inflame) ... easy editing fixes that will make a fine clear story more rhythmic to read ;) I always enjoy your characters and setting and scene Coyote Man ... this one for me has a particularly deep lesson in it .. love the closing!
E.

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Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the help and for reading. I do appreciate.


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Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you dear Julie for reading and the comment.
yep ... what goes around comes around ... though your antagonist is callous in love in this instance ... pain will no doubt visit him ... if that doesn't soften and teach his heart .. i'm afraid he may never have love at all ... live in the Peter Pan syndrome forever :( if you take another look and read for syntax errors i think it will make this very emotive piece better ... readers stumble over "...She ransom.." (should be ransomed) or ".... enough to inflamed..." (should be inflame) ... easy editing fixes that will make a fine clear story more rhythmic to read ;) I always enjoy your characters and setting and scene Coyote Man ... this one for me has a particularly deep lesson in it .. love the closing!
E.

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the help and for reading. I do appreciate.
Wonderfully expressed as hearts intertwine in pain, yet love goes on to find another heart ;-} Karma has a way of repaying the brokenness caused by others.

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Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

You are right dear friend. But we do pay for the sin of hurting another. Thank you for reading and t.. read more
heart tugging write here, Karma will catch up though

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Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

It does and it did. Thank you dear poet for reading and the comment.
and thus, the karma gets revenge. she forgets as he regrets...
Unhappy is his middle name. Now.

j.

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Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

I agree Jacob. Karma is three-fold. I do know and thank you for reading and the comment.

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