Hot Damn

Hot Damn

A Poem by Coyote Poetry
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Just some new words.

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                                 Hot damn

Prettiest woman in the dance hall,
looked at me and shared her enticing smile.
I inventoried her long legs and her tight black dress.
She was a wild orchid in the smoked filled bar.

Her face, gentle and so sweet, made me wish for the dance of the gin  and the sin.
She was ambrosia in the mist of the whiskey and the chaos. 
I knew she was folly and careless angel.

When you kiss a siren, when you want a siren,
no way back to safety,
no way back to sanity.

She was walking toward me,
her long ginger hair moving with her hips, legs and shoulders.
I loved her demanding coffee brown eyes and her sweet smile.

She touched my shoulder and she whispered.
A soldier drinking alone, Austin city, biggest sin.
Dark is the night and when we seek the whiskey only.
We can't know sacred night where we can know,
laughter and good song, bravely.

I told her, she was a treasure, a soldier dream.
Some dreams will break your heart.
She gave me a Devilish smile and her eyes surveyed my face.
She whispered.

"Dark is the night.
We can lay bare, our soul to the moon and the stars.
We can show false face and steal what we can.
Maybe we are just dancers on the quicksand,
moving and grooving to the moon song,
hoping for a taste of elixir of the sweetest kiss.
Pretty lies are still lies and I promise you,
a fond memory and maybe a second dance."

I reached our my hand and I told her my name is Johnnie.
She embraced me and she whispered. You can call me love,
darling and sweetheart my dear Soldiers. She kissed my forehead,
my face-cheeks and a soft kiss to my lips.

She asked, can you Texas two-step Johnnie?
I told her, yes and we roamed to the dance floor.
She held me closely and I smell her perfume of the wild flowers.
I told her. Thank you for the dance and the conversation.
You make me smile.

She laid her head into my shoulder and she whispered.
I am smiling too.

                          Coyote



© 2020 Coyote Poetry


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You painted quite the scene, one I wish I could put myself in. It's a beautiful piece. To truly capture a moment is an impressive feat, a skill which belongs perhaps only to the poet.

As an esteemed colleague, I would suggest that the first comma in the 6th stanza is off-putting.

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Coyote Poetry

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Thank you my friend for reading and the help. I will to publish a book of stories and of poetry in J.. read more



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My favorite part of this long lavish story is at the beginning when you describe the woman in terms of contrasts: "wild orchid in the smoked filled bar" . . . "ambrosia in the mist of the whiskey and the chaos" . . . as always for your seductive tales, realistic, heart-felt & deserving of its title (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I spend seven year as a single man in Texas at Fort Hood. The Texas people, the kindest and most fun.. read more
A very descriptive work. There's no doubt who's the master here! I salute you Sire!

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Thank you Augustus. I appreciate the comment.
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You place the reader mid scene with your wonderfully descriptive words Coyote. No other on here writes as you do :)
Hope you are safe and well


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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Hello my friend. Thank you for reading and the comment. I am doing well and I hope you are doing goo.. read more
A vivid encounter , a special scene that brings chosen words to life. Your description of this encounter is very real and I can picture myself watching this scene in a movie. Keep writing, your style is excellent Well done!

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Thank you dear Betty. I appreciate the comment.
Betty Hermelee

1 Month Ago

My pleasure!
So descriptive Coyote. You took me there, I was drinking too at the bar and watched the evening unfold. I saw the pair of you take to the dance floor. Wonderful writing.

Chris



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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Thank you dear Chris. Dancing, good song and good drink. Paradise for a moment.
A wild orchid with a sweet smile... and all the while full of folly...
still an Angel with long ginger hair and brown coffee eyes.
Dancing on quick sand... grooving to Moon song. Elixir of the sweetest kiss...
Holding you closely with the scent of wildflowers... She loved a soldier called Johnnie.
truly, Pat

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patricia Wedel

1 Month Ago

p.s. We met at Bronco Billy's, a Country Western Bar.
I asked the Band to play, "Because o.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I like the girls who ask men to dance. Some men are afraid of the rejection. I liked how you and you.. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Month Ago

dear John... Romance is what it is all about. I worked in D.C. in a Patent and Trademark Law Firm n.. read more
Such vivid imagery, dear friend. I could see myself in the scene, looking at all this while it happened. Wonderfully written.

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Thank you my dear friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.
This poem was pretty darn good.

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Thank you for reading and the kind words. I do appreciate.
You were adventurous indeed as a soldier and as you ventured into poetry, you bring those wonderful memories alive. You are highly descriptive and a painter with words. Romance and wisdom run in your veins. Wonderful sir.

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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

My best days were in Texas. Always something to do. Always trouble lingering somewhere. Thank you Sa.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Month Ago

Wow! You are welcome sir.
You only get one chance as a soldier, you have to make the most of it.
The medals go into drawers, the women stay with you.


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Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

You are right Paul. A soldier must be brave in war and in Texas. Thank you for reading and the comme.. read more

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