The dance of emotion

Life is fair. We must give to receive.

  The Dance of Emotion.
 
A sweet angel was waiting on the bed for me.
Her skimpy negligee showing silky smooth skin.
She told me. "Come to me please."
I went to her and sat close to her.
 
She desired proof of love.
I traced her body with my fingers.
Her perfume create a havoc.
I desired to taste her tender skin.
Ravish her voluptuous body.
 
I whispered. "All I can give to you is a rendezvous of a misguided man with the desire of illicit and raunchy sex.
I had a meltdown in the emotion of love.
Nullified my heart so long ago."
 
"My only redemption is my desire not to teach you the melody of tarnish words and leave you alone in the seize of hate and loneliness."
 
Beautiful brown eye woman smiles.
 Kissed my hands.
She brought her face to my face. Gave me soft and warm kisses.
She whispered.
 
"We are pure for a moment and treasure perfection in love are only shadowed dreams now. Love is a sham."
 
"Now pride and savor love are precious only to young girl dreams.
I want someone to ignite my soul.
I need naughty and sordid nights of passion."
 
Sometime the prelude to the story is written.
The rise and fall of our heart must surge or what is left?
 
I touch her  silky skin.
Watched the stirring of her  beautiful body.
I stroked her long legs and brought them across my lap.
 
In the trance and solemn light of candle lights.
I kissed her  tan shoulders.
I stripped and lay on the bed.
 
She  straddled me.
She whispered.
"In the misguided game of love."
 
"The saga must go on till the story ends in happiness.
Or at least we will have sweet dreams and memories."
 
                        Coyote
                        22 March 2009
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Author's Note

A old poem when I was younger and life was a open road. Any mistakes I would be thankful for the help. A wise person accept help with thankfulness. Someone was kind enough to assist.

Reviews

[Revolutionary]

I am not used to you writing about such things.You should walk on the erotic edge more often.You are good at it.I don't get the love is a sham part though.I do not think the love was a sham even if it was only the once you loved it.take the love is a sham part out cause it is wrong and it does not go in this poem.all is love

[Mark]

I can relate to this one a lot.

[emmajoy]

Such a memory! You always write with an eye on the truth .. and here you've wrapped truth in an incredible scene where passion was asked for and memories made ..

This yet another example of your own special powerful use of words .. felt a little like a peeping Tom!

I always hesitate to suggest corrections etc. because you have a very special style. Do you type into Word then copy and paste? It helps with punctuation and so forth.. ? But never alter the way your place your words because this is your heart and mind .. and shouldn't be polished and prettied up ..

[YoungWriter20095]

This is UH-MAZ-ING.........it reminds me of me and the guy im "with" right now........anywho great poem

[BelowABridge]

I normally don't read too raunchy of poetry but this was more sweet than lustfull. this was trully a "Dance of emotions" ... sex because of feeling not just two bodies but feeling and passion which I think necessary in love. to be set on fire by such feelings of want and care for your significant other. its beautiful.

[Brianna Brie]

Awesome poem! Enjoyed it much. There a 4 or 5 lines that are too long, but I suspect it is from a computer glitch.

[Helena]

Beautiful work my friend. Amazing insight in this poem about 'the dance of emotion". Lots of emotions flowing truthfully and fearlessly throughout this. Well done!

[Cheryl J. Turner]

I believe that passion is poetry, this has passion. I thought it was beautiful.

[NeverSurrender]

"I whispers all I can give to you" should probably be "I whisper all I can give to you" and "Nullify my heart so long ago." should be "Nullified my heart so long ago" because so long ago indicates a past tense while nullify is present tense.
Also it might be a good idea to put the things that are being said in italics or just do something with it to make them different so we know when it is something that is spoken.

Ok lot of critique on the text again, but that's only because the content is awesome. As always you express yourself wonderfully in your poems. You're one of the few people that when I read their poems I actually feel some of the love you describe. And this poem was also very sexy, nice descriptions of the body (including eyes and all).

My favourite line was probably "I traced her body with my fingers." Great image and wonderful feel to it.

N.S.

[Kyle]

I liked this. Regaurdless of errors. I mess up a lot too with grammar and spelling :0 I suck at spelling, anyways, I loved this, the way you expressed it and explaned her and the mood and how love is it was epic!

[The Water Queen]

I was sad that this ended. This is beautiful and great. Just stunning. to say the least. Great work.