Let's pretend

Let's pretend

A Poem by Centipedle

Blooming red leaves,
Over a brightly colored town.
I remember it like yesterday,
Orange coating the streets.
There were people playing music,
Passing out food.
A festival of autumn,
Fondly within my mind.

Branches free of leaves,
Over a white colored town.
I remember it like today,
Crystals in the streets.
People were bundled up,
Making soup for all around.
A festival of winter,
Where I met you.

© 2016 Centipedle


Author's Note

Centipedle



Sorry I haven't been on, life's gotten busy. I've been searching for a job and working on my mental health I suppose.

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Beautifully structured. I like the contrast between the two stanzas. The brightly colored town and then the white town in the second stanza.
It is a festival all around.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really like the parallel structure between the first and second stanzas. The color imagery is beautiful, as are the descriptions of the townspeople. This is a very sweet, happy poem. It made me smile. Nicely done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such beautiful work frnd, I must say some lines that you have used here are superb giving a feeling of a festival occurring in that moment... There is a touch of sweetness in it with heartfelt memories... Loved it...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like it! It speaks of fun and happy occasions, combined with a possible meeting with someone you love. The simplicity and depth are amazing. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing use of words. The words dance with positive energy and took the reader to better places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago



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