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Unravel the Night

Unravel the Night

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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tell me what is real among the promises we have made and why the blood running through our veins speaks of us as our hearts are seduced.

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Unravel the night as it nods off

to become a wall of darkness

until the sun looks into your eyes

once again

and you feel the pain of truth.

Then tell me what is real

among the promises we have made

and why the blood running through our veins

speaks of us,

as our hearts are seduced.


How can we continue to live on the edge

where each breath we take

challenges our bodies to become

victoriously in control?

When our hearts' wish to speak

of the need to see each other's face

and how love's flame burns

within our eyes then moves

inward to the depth

of our souls.


© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist Liu Zhan

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I love the progression that you've captured in this piece- you start with a cute, children's bedtime type of feeling with innocent nighttime words like "nods." Then you grow up. You start playing with words like "seduced." I like it! It shows the agelessness of love. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Emily :)



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issue of love they say but this sounds more to the questioning of taking the path to find this thing called love for right now there may be a security issue with pain but this is my opinion i could be way off as always keep writing fellow writer.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Kelvin :)
kelvin

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome
This really romantic and so defined this idea of love unraveling the way the night does right before our eyes. Love it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Inda :)
hi Neva trying out a new software this Dragon dictation. It allows me to speak and then it copies my voice down so much simpler than me using a keyboard. I like this poem. The thoughts are always deep sometimes dark painful actually. I hope you're well. I think we both know what it means to grow a little older but I wouldn't trade youth for wisdom. I would give up all the wisdom to live in youth again.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

thank you Tate. I have a funny story about that software. My dad bought it, trained it to his voic.. read more
Tate Morgan

9 Years Ago

that doesn't surprise me. It is a perfect none of them are but of all of them I have checked this on.. read more
All deeply intriguing and filled with the promises of first love, the mysteries of new romance. Charming!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Empress :)
"...tell me..." A concept, a desire, a truth so real while seeking answers in one another, ourselves, our wants, our bodies, our minds. This is so well expressed here, and the artwork chosen is spot on. Fabulous, Neva. Xo. Just fabulous. Xo.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Mel xoooxo
Beautiful writing as usual, full of love pain and angst and worded in your graceful manner. Then tell me what is real among the promises we have made...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Moon :)
There is a beautiful agony here... the poet's heart that sees the world through a different lens than all others... and feels the depth of living so much more as well. Powerful and stirring.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Craig :)
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Pax
wow... i always say you had me with your poem my friend... for it always speaks of real emotions from you... i felt it pass through my ribcage to my heart... Despite the painful truth we still plunge to the depths of love…
Such an awesome write….


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Cold Holidays :)
I found this burning with passion, almost as if a forbidden love has occurred and one desires so much to see it to fruition, to run it's course if for no other reason than to get it out of the blood and where it can be dealt with realistically as it has risen to fever pitch. wonderful :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you Corset :)
This is a very interesting write. I congratulate you on your depth and perspective in this sort of matter.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

9 Years Ago

Thank you phillitup :)

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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