Whispering Flame

I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper
Under the resplendent light of the glorious moon
From the lips of the one who set my heart ablaze in a glance
Then disappeared from my world way too soon

Now I find I search continuously to the ends of the Earth
For the lips that softly whispered my name
As the one who swiftly ignited my heart in a glance
So quickly left me all alone to tend the flame

I hold the whisper of his sweet words of love inside my soul
With a memory, that keeps the fire eternally bright
As I tend the flame with the vision of the eyes that I love
Held closely to my heart every night

Am I forever destined to tend the fire that burns in my soul
As I search for the lips that kindled the flame
Or will my searching eyes finally look once again into his
And hear him softly whisper my name

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Longing for belonging'
The heart aching yearning!

Nice and passionate. I love the first line,
"I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper" - ah the power that soft words possess :)

I just want to bring up one critique in regards to the 3rd stanza. Lines are constructed 15 - 14 - 15 - 9. The last line with 9 syllables detaches itself from that stanza, because it is read so quickly. It was an abrupt ending leaving me wanting more.

Nicely done :)

[Jibey]

Sad, sweet, yearning for the beauty of experience that a loved one leaves behind... Written with feeling and delicacy

[Mauricio Montoya]

wow this is a very beautiful piece, I like the words you chose to discribe those feelings. Excellent write.

[Marie Harrison]

What a lovely poem of an endless passion. I kept thinking of this coming from an ancient sea muse. It's beautiful!

[Gone]

Powerful longing. He would gain a treasure returning to you.

A very wonderful poem.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

well written!!

[Lexi Nicole]

Awesome! I love the feel of this, the tone, the flow, everything just fit perfectly. Great work!

[Marlena]

This is so beautiful and sweet. I love how personal it feels, like something told around a campfire. I really loved this.

Great work 100/100