Whispering Flame

Whispering Flame

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper.............

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I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper
Under the resplendent light of the glorious moon
From the lips of the one who set my heart ablaze in a glance
Then disappeared from my world way too soon

Now I find I search continuously to the ends of the Earth
For the lips that softly whispered my name
As the one who swiftly ignited my heart in a glance
So quickly left me all alone to tend the flame

I hold the whisper of his sweet words of love inside my soul
With a memory, that keeps the fire eternally bright
As I tend the flame with the vision of the eyes that I love
Held closely to my heart every night

Am I forever destined to tend the fire that burns in my soul
As I search for the lips that kindled the flame
Or will my searching eyes finally look once again into his
And hear him softly whisper my name


© 2010 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Longing for belonging'
The heart aching yearning!

Nice and passionate. I love the first line,
"I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper" - ah the power that soft words possess :)

I just want to bring up one critique in regards to the 3rd stanza. Lines are constructed 15 - 14 - 15 - 9. The last line with 9 syllables detaches itself from that stanza, because it is read so quickly. It was an abrupt ending leaving me wanting more.

Nicely done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Sad, sweet, yearning for the beauty of experience that a loved one leaves behind... Written with feeling and delicacy

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Longing for belonging'
The heart aching yearning!

Nice and passionate. I love the first line,
"I heard the sweetest words in barely more than a whisper" - ah the power that soft words possess :)

I just want to bring up one critique in regards to the 3rd stanza. Lines are constructed 15 - 14 - 15 - 9. The last line with 9 syllables detaches itself from that stanza, because it is read so quickly. It was an abrupt ending leaving me wanting more.

Nicely done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow this is a very beautiful piece, I like the words you chose to discribe those feelings. Excellent write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a lovely poem of an endless passion. I kept thinking of this coming from an ancient sea muse. It's beautiful!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful longing. He would gain a treasure returning to you.

A very wonderful poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well written!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awesome! I love the feel of this, the tone, the flow, everything just fit perfectly. Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so beautiful and sweet. I love how personal it feels, like something told around a campfire. I really loved this.

Great work 100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 27, 2010
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Tags: words, moon, love, fire, search

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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