Afraid of Dust

Afraid of Dust

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon.......

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If I told you I am afraid of dust
that catches in places where I am tired

Would you still find me so amazing and fun
If I said what I think to those who have ears to hear
When I looked into your eyes
Would I still be the one

If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon
Will you still love me and the melody I create
Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on
To all those bright clouds
We anticipate

If I struggled to find words that washed over your skin like silk
That lingered dreamily in the light of your morning
Would you still hear the same sweet voice when I am tired
And afraid of dust that catches in places
On words I am forming

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Will you love me the same if my words are not always so lovely to hear?

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I think once you have love for someone, your always going have it. It might change form such as e.i when I was young and "in love with my first girlfriend when I was just in 8th grade and wanted to be her boyfirend. As now 4years later, I still love her just as much I just love her in a different way, as a friend. I think once loved is like matter, it can never be destoyed. However it can be created. Anyway I like you poem it quetoins the peroson if they really love you for you are or for what you can do. Good work!=)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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'If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon
Will you still love me and the melody I create
Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on
To all those bright clouds
We anticipate'

Another great read Neva. This is a poem that I understand fully and I love it all the more because of it. Great job again.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As always Neva a truly wonderful scribe

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

My first thought was, "What a beautiful painting!", but then as I read it's beauty grew with the enhancement of the lovely words. The flow was melodic, almost like a lullaby, though more morose. Very beautiful and poetic! Great job!!!
I especially like the lines,
"If I said what I think to those who have ears to hear
When I looked into your eyes
Would I still be the one."
Makes me think of pillow talk, in a half asleep state. Very bitter sweet, but lovely nonetheless!!!! :D:D:D:D Loved it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think the title should be different....but the poem, is really good..I can totally relate to it..yes, the words we speak might be bitter but the love inside is true.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Don't know about that but your words are truly lovely to read. Excellent poem, very touching and inspiring.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The title threw me off for a second but I get it.
I especially loved the last stanza a very strong and
beautifully written...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Of course I'd still love you, sometimes you have to hear things you don't like, but it's always better to hear them from a friend. *Smile* Your words flow so well together, they're like mismatched puzzle pieces you scavaged over deserts to find and fit together. ~ BlackCl0ud

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


If the song I sing tonight is not a soothing lullaby in an upside moon
Will you still love me and the melody I create
Because no matter how my song plays; we can move on
To all those bright clouds
We anticipate

words of grace and wisdom

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting and true. The biggest fear is that when someone finds out who you really are, will they still look at you the same way?
It's written very, very well. Another amazing, true, hits right home, write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva,
We all have bad days....it's the essence of you that matters...love me for who I am....and understand when I am not all that you want...It's reality...a part of life..and we're all learning as we go along...
Another terrific write, Neva. Something I just come to expect.
Allen

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 24, 2011
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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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