Intricate Sea of Blame

Intricate Sea of Blame

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Can you not come back from where you hide...............

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Can you not come back from where you hide, do you even know

Up from the ashes where your fire once glowed
Do you see the hunters as they search for the flame
There among what is perfectly resting
In an intricate sea of blame

You ask me if the coast is clear while looking over my shoulder
And I wonder if you are trapped in an ancient painting
That holds no answer and amounts to nothing the same
As what will come tomorrow or today
In your dreams awaiting

In the morning, will you be curious when you hear the sound
Of faces growing old and emerging silver-tongued
Will your ears think all daylight has gone when they sing
Of golden pleasures that came round
When you were young

Can you not come back from where you hide, let sorrow be
Feel your heart travel outside of confusion
Forget about the hunters that search for the flame
That intricate sea of blame is merely
A manifested illusion

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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I love the way you use art and nature in your poems, the use of colour and precious metal in the third verse really adds to the richness of the imagery and the last line is just sensational. I love how your work so often seems to directly engage the reader, that makes the poetry even more intense and poignant. You're always a delight to read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I like how you came back to the opening line in the final stanza. What really impressed me about that was you were able to build upon those lines to give new insight. I think that really helped to add a quest-like feel to the poem. I think that really left the person being spoken to with a choice to emerge from that hiding place and face life.

I must also say that I liked the rhyme that you used in the first stanza. I think that they really established the tone for the rest of the piece to flow and fall into place.

My absolute favorite part of this poem are the first two lines of stanza three. I thought it was a nice touch using sound to call attention to the fact that the listener is missing out on life. I also liked the imagery added by the idea of the faces being silver-tongued.

Thank you very much for sharing, this is a very nicely constructed poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


The pictures you use are quite beautiful and leave me gazing for a while even after I read all you wrote. I this you're very articulant and I love reading your work..

Posted 9 Years Ago


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you know Neva we live this life to find joy and happiness, to love another so they can love us...sometimes it just turns into a blaming situation...sadly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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this is excellent, Neva, strong, and straight as an arrow

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I absolutely love how you personify emotions. The people I meet in the worlds you create are nothing short of amazing. I always drink it in never quenching the thirst I have for your eloquent syntax.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I'm not going to say a word about this beautiful canvas of written word. Wonderful!

A writing etched upon the walls of this readers heart.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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another great write Neva. There is always an entrancing rhythm to your poems that make them easy to read while the content makes you stop and think!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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very poignant...i have been there

Posted 9 Years Ago


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awesome work !

Posted 9 Years Ago


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"a manifested illusion" - too often we hold ourselves to be blamed for things we shouldn't...we should value ourselves correctly first of all, and then pay attention to what others hunt within us...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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