Collecting Rain In the Low Light

Collecting Rain In the Low Light

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
"

Each measure is divided by a heartbeat..............

"
























So many days she waited in the low light collecting rain

That by itself represented what you could not see
Changing the world of distant shadows
With fingers that have written
Threads of destiny

Feelings were the price she paid as she diffused the rain
Upon the leaves with love that sought the sun
From those woodlands of her dreams
Where a raging fire in her soul
Only just begun

She rode the waves of living light that flowed to shine
With no expectation that she would be admired
Knowing she was a just a kiss of worship
Who carried her fleeting mist
In her heart’s desire

A song of meditation now lies where she once stood
Collecting rain there in the low light so patiently
Each measure is divided by a heartbeat
And is rewritten every day
As our destiny

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Finding hope and optimism once again..............

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

What I found intriguing was the footnote to these beautiful words... " Finding hope and optimism once again...."

yet these words

"Feelings were the price she paid as she diffused the rain
Upon the leaves with love that sought the sun"

It's like she is drawing it all to divest outside herself, she can't use it but others can...

And then...

"She rode the waves of living light that flowed to shine
With no expectation that she would be admired"

Still she is waiting, anticipating....

Until the end, then it all makes sense

Beautiful Neva, stunning beyond belief! This left me with that small catch in my breath, you know, when you've continued to breath in and in and then you can finally let it go...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

the picture is magnificent, just as the poem, like there is always hope at the end of the tunnel!
wow!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the sun as the night, hope has destiny and optimism has thought man has woman and woman has man or do they? So they both wait, or, she waits, great write

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this. Yes hope is profound and ever longing. I must say the final stanza seems almost to force an ending when the poem wants to go on.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great write, thoughtful....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Destiny...how that word evolves so many emotions and thoughts that keep us striving to encounter...her

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem. As someone said earlier it flowed effortlessly, the imagery was equally as great. Keep writing :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So beautiful :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another Masterpiece
and I'm not just throwing that word around frivolously ....
There's not a word, a line, a stanza that isn't perfect as it stands
you have such a tremendous (uncanny actually) ability to make an entire poem memorable...
Great, Great Write, Neva
allen

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice wordplay and the flow was effortless..nice imagery,

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It must be hard for her to wait in such beauty she can not enjoy alone.Beautiful write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

2077 Views
55 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 4 Libraries
Added on May 10, 2011
Last Updated on May 10, 2011

Author

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

GA



About
Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..