Confidently in Possession of Serenity

Confidently in Possession of Serenity

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Can this serenity save me from dying as just a voice....................

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Can this serenity save me from dying as just a voice
When I am drawn to fly away, my friend
If I begin to live outside of this remoteness of mine
Will I ever see the same sunset again

My heart orbits this serenity confidently in possession
Of the wondrous hope tranquility brings
Yet my mind’s inclination is to leave these seas
To seek the wild winds with my wings

I find such intrigue in not moving, this stillness is me
Becoming an extension of the air I breathe
Yet in this place, I find my heart is not palpable
It needs more than my voice, and me

Before my eyes I know there is joy that waits for me
Outside of this serenity I call being alone
One day the inclination will come for me to fly
You will knock and I will be home

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Writing prompt from Creative Poetry to use the following words: serenity, extension, orbit, remoteness, inclination, intrigue, palpable

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"Yet my mind’s inclination is to leave these seas
To seek the wild winds with my wings"

My favorite line. The whole poem is beautiful, but I find myself completely understanding what you are trying to say with just those two line. Nicely done!

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I find such intrigue in not moving, this stillness is me
Becoming an extension of the air I breathe
Yet in this place, I find my heart is not palpable
It needs more than my voice, and me

Your picture is very pretty. This is another great poem Neva!

Posted 10 Years Ago


To seek the wild winds with my wings < love that line! good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


My spirit feels light as a feather when reading this. Tranquillity flows in every line.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This is interesting, because there's so many ways to take this, and the ending leaves one thinking, brilliant, thank you much appreciated, WS

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Heh. Neva, you certainly made your reply to the prompt your own. Everything in the poem is potent with your style. It isn't forced and I loved that. Sometimes, and I know, answers to prompts can be quite forced. This is very flowing and very natural.

And, to use even more repetition, I enjoyed it very much. x3

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spacer and stripped of unwanted wording, well done Neva, a great read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You mastered the words and made them your own.

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Neva this was truly touching that I felt it in my heart. Never stop writing such beautiful words of wisdom. xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


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To be needed is as natural as breathing to us... but we must trulky also love ourselves if we expect another too.

Another beautifully emotional poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Excellent poem. This flowed nicely and gave me exquisite visions of sunsets on the sea.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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