Kneeling Down in Time

Kneeling Down in Time

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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When circumstances question the proudest man's sight...............

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Knelt down in time, who can say, that life is not forever glowing 
Without doing a full circle inside spaces in their mind
When circumstances do question the proudest man’s sight
On amazing nights, when the full moon is his to find

Can the bottom of your heart get tangled up in winds that stay
Then step inward to wonder why the sky’s not blue
As those thoughts and desires from that one minute past
Softly trickle drop by drop and hold on tight to you

Is this the way it’s always been, just how the deep sea roars
When unexpected words leave nothing but replies
That softly caresses everything you cannot  look upon
Even though you hear it whisper in another’s eyes

Are they never to be thought of, or even touched by our hearts
Without doing full circles inside spaces in our minds
When circumstances question the proudest man’s sight
Will he come untangled, kneeling down in time

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva,
I always love the way you tie things up so neatly and precise...you have such an art of doing that...repeating just enough to remind us where we've been in your heart and your mind...it's refreshing and beautifully done....all the time...
Another great write....
allen

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Love this piece. The imagery is amazing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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To feel so much love and to be inspired by so much passion. This is passion for life pouring out from the pen.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

neva that style is always you the dream like qualitys of your work on great display in this good job and very well done

Posted 12 Years Ago


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The beginning "Knelt down in time" and the end "kneeling down in time" pulled together by a thought so full and complete.

I felt like you were speaking of the life of each and every one of us as a stop in time. Realizing that there is a before and an after and we get just this time to "kneel", to live and to just be. We have this chance to take it all in. At least that is where my thoughts went while reading :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Neva, this is profound and beautiful...so thought provoking and inspiring too..what a great title and ending to this absolutely magnificent piece. another favorite of mine of yours...splendid...

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Your poems are always a kind of voyage into realms I've never imagined.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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' .. As those thoughts and desires from that one minute past ~ Softly trickle drop by drop and hold on tight to you .. 'your words are like magnets, they draw the reader deeper and deeper into their own thoughts about what's laid in front of them; you have that special skill of gently, subtly making people think of 'things' they'd not noticed a while.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very well done poem. Its beautiful,well written,and the message is well expressed.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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you have a way with spinning a tale that allows the reader to picture the scenes in their mind. This is my favorite line in the poem and stands out the most to me.
Can the bottom of your heart get tangled up in winds that stay

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on June 16, 2011
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Tags: time, life, heart, desires, man, pride

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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