Beyond What is Mentioned

Beyond What is Mentioned

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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I could walk with you through all these words that are foreign...........

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You are there beyond what is mentioned when I rise from my chair

And predicting the future seems to always end in futility
I could walk with you through all these words that are foreign
But would I find I was burning in unutterable possibilities

Anticipation you cannot see in my stride when I move vaguely along
Plainly oblivious to all the grass growing under my feet
You see me breathing slowly and wonder how soon I will fly
Into phrases more pleasing than tasting honey is sweet

A temporary distance runs in a curve beyond what is mentioned
Your eyes seize the fire from half-truths you can hear
Present moment is held in nameless rooms hid in the dark
Where you try to read notes I penned for you there

I move vaguely along to plant footsteps that lead to my heart
Creating a path to free your own from this distance
I am not oblivious to the grasses growing under my feet
When I rise from my chair, I am anticipating a change
In our existence

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
*Artist - self_portrait_but_the_self_is_by_vampire_zombie

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creative perfection... and I really mean it when i say that some sentences took my breath away... "I was burning in unutterable possibilities", " You see me breathing slowly and wonder how soon I will fly"... and the last stanza melted my heart away.
beautiful poem and carefully written... I adore the story before all.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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another moving and beautiful piece. You always carry strong imagery that allows the reader to see the scene you are describing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such strong poetry. How you wrap things up. "Where you try to read notes I penned for you there"... I just love it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not sure what it is about, but I feel like a rag doll gently being pulled from side to side.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Once I got the rhythm of the write happening I feel into it .......

The 3rd stanza is delicious Neva

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a personal poem...most definitely...and an excellent message behind all those imagery! a lovely and beautiful poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is kind of scary, but very good. Your metaphores are stunning to say the least!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is always a messae beyond what is actually said....love this :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I think maybe this is like a confession to ones self trying to
realize a change and praying that someone else realizes it
as well. or I could be wrong, nonetheless an incredible piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awesome work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love to read your work in here Neva.
"Creating a path to free your own from this distance"
I find this line of yours striking.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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