A Sound I Could Drink

A Sound I Could Drink

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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My heart pretended you were a sound I could drink...............

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My heart pretended
you were a sound
I could drink
when I went searching
for golden lines full of surprise.
When I walked towards you,
my ears tasted the beat of the earth
and it began to turn
in reverse.

Ringing clear were hundreds of memories
I had kissed freely,
known as all the things you did.
Then in came the rushing sea
crashing into my mind
with waves of everything
you have ever said.

Therefore, I waited by a tree
that had shown its shadow
as being all that I could ever need.
However,
when I looked inside myself,
I found my heart
cold and bare.

A sight I have now become
but there is one thing I surely know.
I could never push aside
the sound of you I drink
from all these golden lines.
My ears will walk
towards you and taste
this beat
until I make you mine.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva,

My name is Ateldoora D. Nightmoon-Barnum and I am the Co-Director of an internationally distributed Fine Arts magazine. My staff has spent a good deal of time searching for a way to contact you and have found nothing. I would like to speak with you about possibly publishing your poem " A sound I could drink" with our magazine. Please reach me at [email protected] I look forward to hearing from you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Neva,

My name is Ateldoora D. Nightmoon-Barnum and I am the Co-Director of an internationally distributed Fine Arts magazine. My staff has spent a good deal of time searching for a way to contact you and have found nothing. I would like to speak with you about possibly publishing your poem " A sound I could drink" with our magazine. Please reach me at [email protected] I look forward to hearing from you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel a sense of regret and longing here that runs deep. great writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

7 Years Ago

Thank you Thoughtcriminal :)
If I may compare this to the newer poem we were discussing earlier... 'ears that see' is a short circuit to me.. ears seeing what? There is no context.... here, 'ears will walk towards you and taste this beat...' you give the image context and so it makes sense. At least to me...

Lovely poem as always by the way. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

8 Years Ago

Thanks Mark........my idea with this poem was to write in a surreal fashion. I tried to make the fi.. read more
This is so incredibly beautiful...what a gorgeous write. The photo is also very lovely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AK
Amazing! The picture compliments the poem really well. I've never seen such beautiful pictures before... Great write!

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CJ
Truly unusual,the mixing of senses almost. It works flowingly.

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EMF
Just had to revist for a fix. Not so much a review as a comment on the writer. Many people choose to review, normally the shortest they can find. It keeps up their stat's. Some authours just draw you back time and again. The quality like found in this poem, says it all.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice poem

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Reading it again I took another gulp of your poetry. I believe I will always thirst for words and prose you summond to the top of your mind...like a fresh well of thought

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the picture fit in the poem so perfectly Neva!
an exquisite poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on August 12, 2011
Last Updated on March 30, 2012
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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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