Pink Satin Roses

Pink Satin Roses

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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She will not be forgiving his sins, when we place them, on the foot, of her grave........

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He thought pink satin roses held the gold on her hand

Dried all the tears from her eyes
Reminded her of kisses, erased the force of his hand
Made amends, for all of his lies

For years, we all watched the light dying in her eyes
He thought roses put the glow back in
Reminded her of whispers and soft midnight sighs
Brought him forgiveness, and her love again

Completely shattered and bruised, outside and in
She accepted each rose he displayed
Knowing he never knew, the damage carried within
The heart, he had broken and played

Tonight, he brought home pink satin roses once again
The gold band on her hand to save
However, this time, she will not be forgiving his sins
When we place them, on the foot, of her grave

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Posted in response to ShameemAkhtar's A Bunch of Flowers

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This poem explains so many people's relationships. There's a selfishness in this poem that portray's a lot of individuals relationships. I agree with Teri B's review. Its sad that she couldn't communicate what was hurting her but it's worse for him because he didn't bother to notice or care what he was doing to hurt her. Another great write Neva. This one is also going on my list of favorites.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This poem explains so many people's relationships. There's a selfishness in this poem that portray's a lot of individuals relationships. I agree with Teri B's review. Its sad that she couldn't communicate what was hurting her but it's worse for him because he didn't bother to notice or care what he was doing to hurt her. Another great write Neva. This one is also going on my list of favorites.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh wow...speechless. He was given chance after chance, and he continued the same pattern. They say people never give the roses while you can still smell them. Good work :-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Yep. Still sad, still stunning. still beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is awesome! Very sadden how things turned out in the end. But the story is is clear and deep at the same time. It sends a message as well. I was shocked at the end because I was assuming the ending in a different way until I read it. I feel like this is a 12 chapter book written in one poem! lol Great Job Neva!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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The depth this carries is insurmountable and the weight would shatter any scale, wonderful write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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ahhhh, i didn't see that coming. so true, enjoy the roses with the living - not death

Posted 9 Years Ago


A beautiful and sad piece of writing!!! I love the words you have used!!! great poem:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really sad, but the words are beautiful if that makes sense. I really enjoyed this poem!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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It took me a little while to decide what the ending is: Does this mean she killed herself? Or does it mean she just died? I can feel an elegance as I read this. It flows in a way that seems almost as if you hardly put effort into making it feel like satin on my tongue as the words passed through. It really is beautiful, and the last stanza filled me with a distinct remorse and sadness. He is still loyal to her though; he still brings her grave flowers, probably shedding tears. But she is gone...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Wow, this tells a sad story. I also like to think about the choice of the satin roses rather than the real roses.
The image is perfect and the wordage spins a tale of somewhat mournful relationship. Excellent work!! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Added on September 3, 2011
Last Updated on December 15, 2011
Tags: roses, abuse, marriage, grave, sins, forgiveness

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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