Looking Into the Transparency of Your Soul

Looking Into the Transparency of Your Soul

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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I can read your thoughts better than I can read your lips.........

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Transparency of your soul looks me in the eye
and I can see the weight of the world
breathing possessively
as you whisper why.
I can read your thoughts better
than I can read your lips
and there is no question
as to what the words mean
delivered.........
with your each and every sigh.

I believe someone told you
the world wears a veiled smile
and attempts
to cling deceptively to your every breath
like a warrior breaks all stillness.
Yet, I see that you are not afraid
to sit and think
about how great men can fall in a moment
when preyed upon...........
by life's unwillingness.

Come with me when your heart aches
from standing in the shadows
of those thoughts
that have been tucked away
in the air you breathe.
Always remember that our time
waits in a path of sunlight
lying beyond the stillness
that will never fade
from all.........
that we can feel
and see.

Yes, the fingertips of happiness
strum my words
setting fires ablaze
so you can see me looking
into the transparency of your soul.
Everything is well-defined
even if it seems out of your control
and there is no need to apologize
when the weight of the world
keeps you.....
from feeling whole.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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There is something about your writing that pulls emotion up inside of me. Your writing is deceptive. I mean that in a very positive praising way. The rhythm and meter of this piece is simple and straightforward. One might see the 'form' on an inspirational card. However, and this is where the deceptive part comes it, your writing goes very deep emotionally. Like a sirens call drifting with the wind and crashing waves, it is powerful, meaningful on the level of life and death.

We are all better off reading your poetry.

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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The perfect marriage of great visuals and literature! I LIKE IT!!

Thanks for sending me the 'read request'. Definitely an addition to the library! ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are writing pretty about a place so hard to reach...that place where as a lover dies, you kiss her so you can breathe her last breath. Pure love and immortal too, in it's way. Don't we all want that, if we have a modicum of imagination, and romance holding sway in our souls? And maybe 6 braincells turned on?

I'm approaching the winter of my life. I think that my hope has been misplaced. I think that I am too jaded and beaten down to give this its proper due. I wish with all that I could still believe, as you do. I can't.
Having run my mouth to overflow, darlin', this is a damn fine write. Deep bows in your direction, and all of that.
Brian

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Absolutely loved your final paragraph here. Amazing piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really nice comforting thoughts, a relief in the eyes of the burdened...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great poem.I love the flow and the image of one so see through yet so elusive with their feelings.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Life has taught me there are three ways we are perceived.
1. The way we see ourselves
2. The way others see us.
3. The way we truly are

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The imagery is perfect, every word keeps me wanting more.
100/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


Each stanza buld up the strength of the next stanza, This was simply awesome!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow! What an extraordinary poem. This is so elegant and it flows smoothly. Great Job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Lyrical , I see you... beautiful and the last stanza is striking .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 23, 2012
Last Updated on May 5, 2012
Tags: soul, standing, stillness, warrior, time, world, weight, sunlight, path

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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