In Time

In Time

A Poem by Lyingwithlions

In all the tears we have shed,

From birth through tribulations and grief each meet

Pushing aside our greatest fears for the reason,

How after being knocked down we rose back to our feet


Time after time we have bled,

Just as our wounds have scabbed to heal

So to has our existence,

Which contains both life and death for us to feel


We are from which we have fled,

A people Lost and hopeless yet still going forward

In a direction that should be questioned,

Is this the right or wrong way in which we move toward?


Will we confront the things that we Dred?

Into the unknown within all its mysterious space

With mountains to climb,

And cliffs abound which require leaps of faith


See now in the lives we have led:


O U R S E L V E S !

© 2015 Lyingwithlions


Author's Note

Lyingwithlions
This is a revised version of an original that was put down while just playing around with words. (Which I love to do)... I have to thank Richard Puetter, for his comments and suggestions. I took his advice and rolled up my sleeves to give it something more.

Thank you Rick, looking forward to more challenges. :)


The original:

In all the tears we have shed.

Time after time we have bled.

We are from which we have fled.

Will we face what we have dred?

See now in the lives we have led.

O
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S
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Great use of words and thoughts.
"We are from which we have fled,
A people Lost and hopeless yet still going forward
In a direction that should be questioned,
Is this the right or wrong way in which we move toward?"
Right or wrong. We must go forward. I do agree. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow! The way you have arranged the structure of this poem is really great. And I love the way you highlighted the first words and how they say something put together. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyingwithlions

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the review. It was fun creating this piece.
Nicely done about time, future. Great that another took the time to help you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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There comes a time to slap a poet on the back and boast of their mastery with words. And then there is a time when a poets words leaves you speechless and all you can do is Stand and applaud. Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! This is one of those times :~)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyingwithlions

8 Years Ago

I am truly overwhelmed with gratitude for such a gracious comment!

Your review inspi.. read more
You have such a way with words! This is just wonderful and I think it is great how you found someone in which to get advice and grow from. Write on!! :-}

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyingwithlions

8 Years Ago

Thank you cousin, so do you! The kindness and generosity from those willing to take the time and hel.. read more
Dara

8 Years Ago

I couldn't be happier and am so impressed with your writing! Looking forward to reading much more of.. read more
Wonderful job.
It's great when we get valuable advice to grow and improve.
But I applaud you for rising to the challenge. Sometimes people hate critique, even when it's well meaning.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyingwithlions

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I'll accept all the critique given, it will only make me better at what I love to do. :)
"How after being knocked down we rose back to our feet"

This line Sir gave me courage to stand up again...
Thanks a lot for this wonderful piece..
^________^

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyingwithlions

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! That gave me a huge smile. :)
binibiningmaya

8 Years Ago

You are most welcome Sir :)
Yes, our lives are a sort of fingerprint of the people we are. A good observation.

Enjoyed.

Best regards,

Rick

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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