Thirst

Thirst

A Poem by Chellie
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Vampire poetry. Prompt from oneword.com

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Blood boiling in his veins

Pulse heavy in his neck

Eyes like crimson

 

Fangs elongate

Hunger beating though him

Thirst taking over

 

Target in sight

Rush of adrenaline

Ready to strike

 

Teeth puncturing skin

Screams fill the air

Blood draining

 

Body falls to the ground

Smile graces his lips

Thirsty no more

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2011 Chellie


Author's Note

Chellie
For a contest.

I had to use a prompt from oneword.com. It has become one of my favorite websites. It always gives me ideas. The word today was thirst. It went perfect for what I was in the mood to write. Enjoy.

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I agree, prompts are really an inspiration to us, it knock out the ideas inside us which cannot be used normally, but it's always helpful! I love this, a very simple and short poem, but I love the flow of it, very smooth, I agree that you can give more details, maybe on the victim? Make the readers scream when we read it! However, I love the details and descriptions you've given, keep it up!
Nice Job!
BTW, good luck on the contest :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Mmmm digging the vampiric smile.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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WONDERFUL. BRILLIANT. PERFECTION.

When I read "Smile graces his lips" it just sounded perfect, I can't explain why.



Posted 7 Years Ago


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ATG
A very good poem. It was well written and there were no noticeable errors. I a decent sense of a vampire stalking his prey from this which is good as well. Overall, it was a good read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I think its fine how it is. Actually, I love how things are described just well enough for you to know the subject. After reading this I have one thing in common with him--completely satisfied.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Kia
Ooh, nice! I love how you're describing the vampire without ever saying the word vampire!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really love it! Sweet! It really flows. Gives me the chills! Lovely!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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vampires are awesome, but they are very deadly. I love it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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A vision of a very hungry vampire. I enjoyed your poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Wow I loved this write,
Such a dark delightful read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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this is a very intertaning one.quite right i think for my contest

Posted 8 Years Ago


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