Waka #1

The waka is a Japanese 5-line poem (or stanza) that is often considered synonymous with the tanka, because both have a 5-7-5-7-7 syllable per line structure.

Troubled wall cloud grows, 

growing darker with my mood. 

Thunderous sulking, 

streaks across a blooming sky. 

What nerve you have to ask why.

Author's Note

The first two lines treat one subject, the second two treat another, and the last line is a refrain or paraphrase.

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

Interesting form. What I get from these lines is that someone is a half inch away from breaking bad.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Just trying to follow the rules and just let it fall in place, more or less.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Great format- love the structure and the imagery! Oh, how frustration and anger grow when it goes unnoticed by someone close! :-)

[Cherrie Palmer]

thank you Phill :)

[Kerra]

Wow, this is really good, I enjoyed this form