The First Time (sedoka)

two sets of 5 - 7 - 7. Dialogue between lovers

“Your eyes hold the stars             

Those stars entangle my sight

The first time I beheld you”

          

“Your words framed my heart  

Now entwined it beats for you 

The first time I beheld you” 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words dear Cherrie.
“Your eyes hold the stars
Those stars entangle my sight
The first time I beheld you”
I loved the above lines. To be overtook by the eyes of another. A good place to know. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cherrie Palmer]

I loved the notion of the poem being dialog. I may try another one of these. I think you would be especially good at them .

[Coyote Poetry]

Dialog is hard dear Cherrie. Jack London did it best.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow. What a powerfullt romantic poem.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I've never tried one of these poems before. I may try another.

[Cassie]

wow..this is beautiful, am smiling even louder

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Cassie and what a beautiful smile it is. :)

[NotUsinganymore]

Sweet poem, I liked this one.