The Bevy

wedge in motion land
spreading ripples soon dwindle
bevy allay low

Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

Nicely done in few words. You have the deft touch of a skilled word painter!

[Roth Jordain]

Hi Cherrie,
I am new so I hope I'm ding this correctly.
Not many poets I've read can create the imagery you have in the humble haiku, in perfect count and form.
I can virtually see the bevy [love the imagery that word portrays] of graceful swans swopping in one after another in a vee landing formation spreading many dwindling ripples across a smooth still pond.

Beautiful writing, poet -- thank you,
Roth

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Roth.
...And this is exactly how we interact. Post, read, review; repeat.
We send messages to each give suggestions. Occasionally offer corrections (with a smile).
Mostly we make friends here that we share our Passion with.


So I say welcome to the cafe and I can't wait to return the visit.

[Roth Jordain]

Cherrie,
I look forward to sharing with you.
What a lovely welcome and response -- I am beholding to you.
Roth

[Cherrie Palmer]

You are very welcome some of us have been here a very long time ⌛️ (13+ years) so we can forget what it's like being new. I have tried other writing ✍️ communities and even though this one is not perfect. I think it is the best. I hope you make many new friends and find the outlet you are looking for.

[Roth Jordain]

In you Cherrie I think I've already found a friend.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Seems so, birds of a feather 🪶...

[Einstein Noodle]

i think the use of the language in this ancient form of senryu is superb, mon Cherrie! absolutely superb .. "Bevy allay low" .. are you kidding me??? here in the USA we have been experiencing the worst, viscous aggressive divisions in my 73 yr. memory. i apply your senryu to this social condition .. would that the bevy could take some comfort in the diminishing ripples .. of course "The Bevy" can be seen in many ways .. the war in Ukraine, the Covid Pandemic ... great stuff in your little gem says i!
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I've never seen the world in such a state either. I wish it could be that simple.
And thank you my friend for the review. I'm pleased you enjoyed this simple poem.

[lightsong]

"The Bevy" the word is poetical and musical... I LOVE swans so extra extra taste for me here (I stole the photo :>). I remember reading this lovely and beautiful little gem but I don't know why I didn't leave my review? your lines move with life and vibrate with beauty.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good morning Light and thank you. Bevy and allay are two of my favorite words. They sing when you say them and dance in our imaginations.
I am so pleased you liked this one.

[Lisasview]

Hi Cherrie, Others might think that writing a short fabulous poem such as yours was easy but the truth is when using less words to make a point it actually takes a long, long time to get it just right..
I appreciate your words,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Lisa 😊

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome Cherrie
Lisa

[duff]

Short and sweet with a touch. So many opportunities with many minds present.

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) thank you Duff

[duff]

You are very welcome. I enjoy your writing.

[keith]

haiku by all measures
'bevy allay low' ... great closer

[Cherrie Palmer]

I was going for broke: two of my favorite words in one poem.
Originally I had a 'the ' in it and reworked it. I'm really glad I did.
:) thank you Keith for the encouragement

[keith]

hey, it's how i roll!
perfect as is

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I really love thiss. A beautiful senryu

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Dale 😊

[Fabian G. Franklin]

How delightfully romantic. I was attacked by a big bull swan once. His mate had cygnets in a neighboring pond. I just stood my ground and walked right toward him like a predator. He changed his mind and his direction. We can't let the birdbrains push us around. ;)

[Cherrie Palmer]

We never had swans but I love watching them.
My grandpa Frank had geese and they were the best guard dogs around. They would send me running 🏃‍♀️ for my life when I was a girl.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A swan is like a goose on steroids. They are fierce, this one hissed and growled. I kept looking at him like he was a plate of fried chicken. Hahaha!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol I used to feed swans in a city park. So as long as you had bread it was all good.

[Richard🖌]

Gorgeously rendered Haiku, Cherrie ⛩

From beautiful artwork to choice imagery word painting, this one sings.
Though, there is one swan displayed, I know from my own experience the raucous noise a bevy of them can make … then, as suddenly calm and quiet as their stilled ripples.

Good stuff, Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Cherrie Palmer]

I couldn't find the picture I wanted of a landing wedge so I went with the single swan. I really like this poem. Bevy is one of my favorite words (crazy I know). The word is just so gaceful..
You write such masterful haiku's I'm very pleased you liked it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

When we lived in Tulsa I use to go to a little pond with swans they are so majestic.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I was able to cut out 'the' from it.