The Bevy

The Bevy

A Poem by Cherrie Palmer

wedge in motion land
spreading ripples soon dwindle
bevy allay low

© 2022 Cherrie Palmer


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Nicely done in few words. You have the deft touch of a skilled word painter!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Hi Cherrie,
I am new so I hope I'm ding this correctly.
Not many poets I've read can create the imagery you have in the humble haiku, in perfect count and form.
I can virtually see the bevy [love the imagery that word portrays] of graceful swans swopping in one after another in a vee landing formation spreading many dwindling ripples across a smooth still pond.

Beautiful writing, poet -- thank you,
Roth

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome some of us have been here a very long time ⌛️ (13+ years) so we can forget.. read more
Roth Jordain

1 Month Ago

In you Cherrie I think I've already found a friend.
Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

Seems so, birds of a feather 🪶...
i think the use of the language in this ancient form of senryu is superb, mon Cherrie! absolutely superb .. "Bevy allay low" .. are you kidding me??? here in the USA we have been experiencing the worst, viscous aggressive divisions in my 73 yr. memory. i apply your senryu to this social condition .. would that the bevy could take some comfort in the diminishing ripples .. of course "The Bevy" can be seen in many ways .. the war in Ukraine, the Covid Pandemic ... great stuff in your little gem says i!
E.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

I've never seen the world in such a state either. I wish it could be that simple.
And thank.. read more
"The Bevy" the word is poetical and musical... I LOVE swans so extra extra taste for me here (I stole the photo :>). I remember reading this lovely and beautiful little gem but I don't know why I didn't leave my review? your lines move with life and vibrate with beauty.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

Good morning Light and thank you. Bevy and allay are two of my favorite words. They sing when you s.. read more
Hi Cherrie, Others might think that writing a short fabulous poem such as yours was easy but the truth is when using less words to make a point it actually takes a long, long time to get it just right..
I appreciate your words,
Lisa, now in Spain

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

Thank you Lisa 😊
Lisasview

1 Month Ago

You are most welcome Cherrie
Lisa
Short and sweet with a touch. So many opportunities with many minds present.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

:) thank you Duff
duff

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome. I enjoy your writing.
haiku by all measures
'bevy allay low' ... great closer

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

I was going for broke: two of my favorite words in one poem.
Originally I had a 'the ' in i.. read more
keith

1 Month Ago

hey, it's how i roll!
perfect as is
I really love thiss. A beautiful senryu

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

Thank you Dale 😊
How delightfully romantic. I was attacked by a big bull swan once. His mate had cygnets in a neighboring pond. I just stood my ground and walked right toward him like a predator. He changed his mind and his direction. We can't let the birdbrains push us around. ;)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

We never had swans but I love watching them.
My grandpa Frank had geese and they were the b.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

1 Month Ago

A swan is like a goose on steroids. They are fierce, this one hissed and growled. I kept looking at .. read more
Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

Lol I used to feed swans in a city park. So as long as you had bread it was all good.
Gorgeously rendered Haiku, Cherrie ⛩

From beautiful artwork to choice imagery word painting, this one sings.
Though, there is one swan displayed, I know from my own experience the raucous noise a bevy of them can make … then, as suddenly calm and quiet as their stilled ripples.

Good stuff, Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard🖌

Posted 1 Month Ago


Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

I couldn't find the picture I wanted of a landing wedge so I went with the single swan. I really l.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

When we lived in Tulsa I use to go to a little pond with swans they are so majestic.
Cherrie Palmer

1 Month Ago

I was able to cut out 'the' from it.

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Cherrie Palmer
Cherrie Palmer

Oakland, AR



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I am a published poet and love poetry. My husband and I live near the White River, and love trout fishing. I find my surroundings a great inspiration to me. I also have two books on Amazon Kindle: O.. more..

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