Stars Foregoing

coiled wind whispers
loon berceuse stars foregoing
lulling waters trill

Author's Note

https://youtu.be/4ENNzjy8QjU

Reviews

[lightsong]

OMG! definitely You are a Master of Haiku! You set a whole world with these three lines, amazing, so beautiful...

[Cherrie Palmer]

I was hoping to slow time and let the moment unfold with ambience. That could be heard and felt. read moreI was hoping to slow time and let the moment unfold with ambience. That could be heard and felt.
I'm thrilled you could feel this tender poem.

[lightsong]

You did it MASTERFULLY dear Cherrie! You are more than welcome 🌞

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked when the moon rises at dust by the lake. Create artwork for our eyes. Amazing use of description dear Cherrie. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you 😊
My friend

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Cherrie.

[Chris Shaw]

Unusual word choice Cherrie. I have learned a new word today. Very nice Haiku, especially appealing is the first five syllables. Loved your posted image too. Hope your Monday has been a good one.

Chris

[keith]

all right school marm, new word on me
had to look berceuse in the dic
good word but difficult for a ten cent word kinda guy like me
i did like this with such sharp precise manner

lulling waters trill ... visionary!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I don't like or want to chunk in high-tone words. But, sometimes, I have words I love to hear and what better place to splash them about.

[keith]

it works despite my ignorance
now i know word master!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Not hardly, but I do try to keep it interesting.

[Lisasview]

Hi Cherrie,
Love your use of words not often used.
Your poem flowed beautifully..
I so loved it,
Lisa, about to teach a watercolor class on Zoom...

[Cherrie Palmer]

That's amazing I wish I could paint. Hope your class is a success and thank you my friend for your review.

[Lisasview]

I teach several times a week on zoom and Skype
Most of my students started out saying that they wish they could paint and I showed them that they could…
You are most welcome..

[Temperance]

Such beauty in nature and the sounds can be so comforting if we only listen. This brief but, comforting poem took me on a trip into the woods. Thank you Ms. Cherrie for sharing. Makes me want to make a trip to the woods. Temp

[Cherrie Palmer]

Hello Temp
And thank you 😊

[Ken Simm.]

Such a beautiful use of words creating an enormous atmosphere. Even considering the small number of words.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Hello Ken and good afternoon 😊
Berceuse I'd one of my favorite words and till this Haiku I've never used it.
So when I was filling in my mental image of the water a loon seemed like the perfect choice.
I am glad you liked it.

[KAREN]

I love your word choices! I think it's beautiful!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Karen 😊I wanted the mental image to flow gentle like the call of the bird carried in the distance.
I'm really happy you enjoyed this one.

[KAREN]

My pleasure!

[William Michael Reeves]

The loon sounds just like Coyote Poetry! (Hope you read that Coyote) You know me, I'm going to have to look up 'berceuse'. Then it will make sense I'm sure.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love the sound of that word. It just sings which is fitting because it means lullaby

[William Michael Reeves]

A musical composition in 6/8 time. Having a soothing effect. A chantey. Looney lulling lullabies. We'll have to write poems using all our favorite words. Our Ten favorite words.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I think we should use those words more often. It gives richness to our writing.

[JE Falcon]

NICE! And I do believe this could be called a haiku well worded.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you :) and yes I penned it as a haiku.
I'm glad you enjoyed this one.