Murky Water

Beware the Trick or Treat

 

 

 

Murky water black as night holds a curse that brings a fright.

neither sun, nor moonlight glow reveals this evil as it repels all hope. 

So, leave not the path of faith or you will find the hand of fate.

Foolish boy and stupid girl wandering off into forbidden wood

Tickle your toes upon my banks and upon your souls I will feast.

Hear them giggle as they come,

But nary again will they make a sound.

 Darkest depths will consume their cries

and muddy bog will conceal this crime

…

as I patiently

wait for another.

Author's Note

maybe

Reviews

[Lorry]

There was always one house, no matter where you lived, that not even candy would tempt you to enter their gates. Even shutting us up as we passed in case we heard her cackle and make a run for it.
Now fast forward 40 years and I am the old curmudgeon that scares them all away 😀

[Cherrie Palmer]

lol, who knew.
It is funny there is always that one house.

[Robert Trakofler]

Mon cherrie... I can hear you saying this to your grands on halloween before you send them off to loot warning them to not become the murky waters bounty...LOL love it:)

[Cherrie Palmer]

How else do you keep the kids out of trouble. A good scary warning--
trespassers beware

[Robert Trakofler]

he he... it keeps getting better:)

[Cherrie Palmer]

I think the flow is much better. I may be done. ?

[Robert Trakofler]

I am not that bold:) but i must say it relates better and I like the giggle line

[R.E. Ray]

Cherrie, I see the devil in the "murky water," not only mocking the "foolish boy" and "stupid girl," but hopeful he'll own them in their naivety. It's a dark, gripping image that sends shivers through the reader. If you're reworking it, you have a good start.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you, I like it over all but I am hoping to smooth out the sound of it out.
The flow seems awkward to me.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Must be reworked maybe tonight

[Ed Hart]

oooooooooooooH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Nimbus Thread]

Goodness this is creepy. Murky selfish evil indeed!

Happy Hallows Eve!

[?]

Hey Cherrie, trick or treat
lol
What a cute lil piece for Halloween. Does get a lil spooky in these Oklahoma woods down here.
Loved this, very cute

[Gomer LePoet]

I'm a stayin away from yer pond. you gots them snakes and wild cows runnin around there. so trick or treat and smell my feet I'll find myself something good to eat.

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Kind of cute in a way, I like this read
it is a sheer delight, Wonderfully written Cherrie!