The Lost City

The infrastructure of your gaze

 is the lost city

people can only see the relics 

but they dream about having lived it

Author's Note

Maybe I should extend this...

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, no...this says so much in these four lines...

the speaker has lived the gaze...others just dream of being looked at in the same way.

they see relics...i like that..it's like eyes that once could look upon another with love...but that city has been lost in so much pain that now the eyes seem vacant, like a ghost town.

i always think "less is more"
and like the brevity here.

you are really good, Frontier.
and here i was sitting with drooping eyelids ready to hit the sack...your poetry knocked me awake.

jacob

[Frontier]

Thank you, Jacob. I will leave it as is, I feel it does say what I had in mind. Have a good sleep.

[Alessander]

I like the idea of a gaze having an infrastructure. It implies a calculating person, almost mathematical or abstract.

However, you extend the metaphor and take it in another direction. It's as if this person has been utterly annihilated like Berlin in WWII, and one can only imagine the kind of city/person it was before.

I like the length too. No need to add on to it. Brevity is the soul of wit, etc.

Really like this piece.

[Frontier]

Thanks! You totally get it.