Suspension Effect

Suspension Effect

A Poem by Chidoriflower
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an idea i had on being in love wit being on a suspension bridge or ur partner drives rlly fast

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My heart beats like the pump of the pedal break
The way you move, the way you take a sharp turn
Is this some kind of dream, am I even awake

The feeling of adrenaline, my heart's on a suspension bridge
You've got me swinging on every word, but I have good balance
The look in your eyes gets blood flowing to all my appendages

Sometimes I fear I might fall too hard
The fear is more real now that I know who you are
But there's ropes to hold on to, promises not broken yet

The rain falls down in a light shower
It reminds me of the tears we both littered
But now we're screaming and it's the best thing

I should have driven in the first place
But you insisted and it's so adorable
Nothing that happens will ever erase the smile on my face

Let's drive home, so I can show you the effects
The way you make me feel, the ways you are so good
Let's walk on life until the roads begin to connect

 

© 2017 Chidoriflower


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"my heart's on a suspension bridge
You've got me swinging on every word, but I have good balance
The look in your eyes "

Posted 2 Years Ago


"But there's ropes to hold on to, promises not broken yet

The rain falls down in a light shower
It reminds me of the tears we both littered"

Posted 2 Years Ago


First of all, awesome idea, unique and a tad kookie.
Secondly, the title is inspired.
The write flows well and the feeling of being on the bridge with wind blowing into the car is well conveyed. The wish to imbue this kind of experience - to let your lover feel what and how the speaker feels speaks volumes about the relationship.
I love the sentiment.
Well done Chidoriflower.
:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Chidoriflower

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much :) That sounds like a well thought out review, I'm so grateful for it!!
Nice! I am interested to see more

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice writing I love your thought that comes from your heart. Thanks for sharing. Keep it up

Best
Szhzia

Posted 2 Years Ago


Chidoriflower

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your review friend ^-^
SZHZIA

2 Years Ago

was my pleasure and you are welcome :-)

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Added on January 9, 2017
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Tags: poem, driving, love, suspension bridge

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Chidoriflower
Chidoriflower

R.I.P, CA



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I love reading, from YA books to classic English literature. Writing is my vent usually. I'm gay as hell. I like food, anime, videogames, and traditional dances. (Like waltzing, salsa, west/east coast.. more..

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