She Wonders...

A quick glimpse inside my mind... You have been warned...

"Once upon a year gone by, she saw herself give in.

Every time she closed her eyes, she saw what could have been."

 

Darkness closes in around her, there is no escape.

Slowly autumn fades to winter, all life is swept away.

Except this time... There will be no spring to follow.

No sun will shine to melt the ice covering her heart.

 

A prisoner in her own mind, the shadows hold her back.

Shadows of a distant past she cannot forget torture her,

make her weep, draining the very life from her body and soul.

Eyes once so bright have faded and become vacant.

 

She looks in the mirror and hates herself,

hates what she has become and wants it all to stop.

Every day she looks for a reason to hold on, to keep going,

but every day it's just another lie, another false hope.

 

Knowing there is no escape, she quietly slips away.

No letter does she write, no tearful good-bye, she's simply gone.

Looking at the sky for the last time, she whispers to no one

"I wonder what's waiting... on the other side..."

 

Author's Note

It's terrible, I know that, but I had to write it. The opening couplet is from Vanessa Carlton's song Paradise. Let me know what you think of it...

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[Frank F. Atanacio]

a very good write--the title--perfect :) Frank

[TidgeTiger]

i think it has a nice rhythm to it. very sad, promotes an understanding...of that emotion i guess

[Steph]

you're wrong, this is not terrible.