the dark sky

I've seen the dark sky.
It looked like a never ending hole.
Every second turning bigger and darker.
Every second seeming to swallow me whole.

How can such an evil looking thing exist.
It looked like a monster from the comic books.
It looked so powerful and indestructible.
At times it looked like it was full of life.

The air felt wet all around me.
It seemed like rain was upon me.
So fast the wind blew hard.
leaving drops of rain on my face.

looking into the sky i found the eye of the storm.
deep inside of it I could see a white light.
A half an hour passed and i stood there still.
my clothing wet, rain dropping down my hair.

The end of the storm came and with it I heard sounds.
I turned my head to the right and saw that beautiful face.
walking towards me, she moved so smooth.
All dressed up in red, I saw her wave her  hand at me.

she got closed and hugged me from behind.
I could feel her body warmth and smell her sweet aroma.
She could feel my desire to kiss her and so she got in front of me.
I pulled her close to me and kissed her.

I kissed her red lips and they tasted like candy.
Those 2 minutes seemed like an eternity.
An eternity that I wanted to live for ever.
An eternity that I wanted to live with her.

she pulled me away.
Giving me time to take a few deep breaths.
Giving me time to inhale some of that wet putrid air.
I just wanted to keep on taking her breaths away.

It seemed like  I was missing something.
It seemed like I was incomplete
Just the thought of getting close again.
It gave me chills.

To kiss her meant to lose myself.
To find my deepest desires and not be able to control them.
To find myself free from the whole wide world for a few seconds.
To find myself not caring about anything but the moment.

we walked on the mud like children.
Just jumping on any puddle that we saw.
Laughing at anything and everything.
I finally went home to her.

I did not care for the time lost waiting.
I did not care for the rain on my clothing.
Nor did I care for the storm that passed.
I just cared for her and the moment we were living.


 

Author's Note

Please point out any grammar errors. Never too young to learn.

Reviews

[Bertie]

An interesting story...
Very simple and to the point. I wonder perhaps if sometimes a little more indepth writing would make this an even better poem than it already is...
So when you say "How can such an evil looking thing exist." I almost feel cheated because I know you could go into greater detail about what "thing" or even just another word than "thing"; I have a personal vendetta against the word "thing" lol
And the part "Those 2 minutes seemed like an eternity.
An eternity that I wanted to live for ever." Brilliant ! But I want to know more ! lol It's a very good piece please don't think otherwise, these are only my personal opinions. But still a good read :)

[Akshat♥]

I always like to sit in the dark and realize my inner self..
but for me being in darkness is bad habit...
darkness sometimes make you bind..blind to understand people..
nicely written piece!! keep writing :)

[brenda]

this si really really sweet poem !:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. The time when youth is the greatest strength. Need to dance and play in the rain. A very good story. I hope you had a happy ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote