No Other Way (RHYME)

No Other Way (RHYME)

A Poem by Chris Yip
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Hearbreak story from a song I wrote about a friend who attempted suicide by overdosing on sleeping pills

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NO  OTHER  W ay (Rhyme

You  left  me  just,  the  other  d ay,

          You  said  you  had,  no  other  w ay,

                You  put  me  in,  complete  dism ay,

         The  fact  that  you,  have done  foulpl ay,         

 

             And  I,  saw  you,  walking  aw ay,

          You  left,  me  like,  broken  red  cl ay,

        

   You  put,me in,moral decay                                

We  were  young,  so  strong  and  g ay,

          Making  love,  was  just  for  pl ay,

 

                          

    You  had  to  go,  away  they  s ay,

                I' m  going  there,  without  del ay,

                 My  broken  heart,  the  price  to  p ay,

                  I  think  I' ll  go,  to  bed  and  l ay,

 

              

       And here,  I' m,  just  an  ashtr ay,

                  So cool, I'm, tried to portray                            

  No  hope,  there's  not,  even a ray                                      A message  I  do,  displ ay,

                    Forgiveness  for  you,  I' ll  pr ay,   

 

BRIDGE 

 I  regret,  not  telling  you,  what  I  had  to  s ay-ay   

I  regret,  not telling  you,  what  I  had  to  s ay-ay

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2012 Chris Yip


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Chris Yip
Based on a true story of a friend of mine

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it sounds so lyrical. you kept faithful to the one sound, 'a'. at least he is trying his best to forgive her. great anecdote to a real story.

Posted 8 Years Ago


You highliting the rhymes made it a bit cumbersome to read honestly. But at second read through I got over it. It makes for some decent lyrics but honestly the first few rhymes felt a bit forced but they made more sense later down in the piece. I hope you take my criticism constructively!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Song or poem...either way, this is an amazing write. I re-read it a few times.

Posted 8 Years Ago


their has to be an easier way,But love hurts as much as elates us

Posted 8 Years Ago


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EMF
A wonderfully tragic poem, yet with a true sense of fun. It reminded me of a chap called Jake Thackery, who could take a darkness and with that element of play make t something beautiful, inspite of the subject matter. A rare trick and one you have done so well. Superb work Chris and one to be justly proud of.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a very unusual poem that would due to its structure would make a good song,especially as you use the songwriters term bridge.It seems to be based on a very tragic event,Good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Hey i must admit that i really like the way you put forward this poem..... Your rhyming scheme makes it yet more magnetizing..... need i say any more?

Posted 8 Years Ago


A neat and nice poem/song to read. It's also nice that you got all the lines to end with 'ay', although it's very simple, it's very difficult for many people to take on that challenge nowadays. You have my kind words, I'm very sorry that it's a true story. Things will look up soon, do not worry your dear, little self.
Amazing write, keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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AK
Awesome! The end was absolutely mesmerising! You got all the lines ending with 'ay'....Wow I could never have done that. So sorry it's based on a true event.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this poem a lot. The flow of words and the use of words made this a fun poem to read. It was based on a departure but I like the set-up and the ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago



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