The Athelete

The Athelete

A Poem by Christina May Shanaberg
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What I believe being an athelete should be!

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THE ATHELETE

 

He knows the power of living flesh,

Always looking healthy and fresh;

He feels the pain of agony,

Of being defeated by his own body;

Each contest rating a personal score

And each point driving him on to more;

Life becomes a physical test,

Requiring, ever, better than his best;

Winning is not being first, in the game,

Or a step up the stairway of fame;

Triumph of victory is for giving his all,

No matter how weak or small;

It is a battle, against himself,

And pride is not a trophy, on a shelf,

But, rather, he is proud of showing

His bravery by trying and doing.

© 2010 Christina May Shanaberg


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This is an interesting poem. Your rhymes are creative and don't feel forced.

Lines 8 and 11 have some awkward working that made me stumble. You use a bit too many commas as well. I suggest removing commas from lines 9 ("first"), 13("battle"), and 14 ("trophy").

This is a good poem though, just a few stylistic problems. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is an awesome story I love the way you describe a real athlete. It shows me everyday what kind of athlete I am. Thanks for your writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The classic English couplet poem... it captures the mentality of the athlete perfectly...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gotta love this one nice expression of the word good rhyming very nice exactly on the topic . I hope more athletes are like that. Thanks for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an interesting poem. Your rhymes are creative and don't feel forced.

Lines 8 and 11 have some awkward working that made me stumble. You use a bit too many commas as well. I suggest removing commas from lines 9 ("first"), 13("battle"), and 14 ("trophy").

This is a good poem though, just a few stylistic problems. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This expresses well how an athlete should be, giving it their all, not for fame or a trophy, to feel good that they did their best. Great job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great thoughts about how an athlete should and can be .. some great lines:

'It is a battle, against himself, And pride is not a trophy, on a shelf, But, rather, he is proud of showing His bravery by trying and doing. '

Think the meter jumped a little at times but it's a great piece of writing nonetheless. Thank you very much for sharing.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I believe an athlete is always trying to do better and bring out their best and strive to be a winner. They can be a winner even if a trophy is not the prize. I like this poem...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 13, 2010
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Tags: Athelete, Pride, Victory, Challenge, Triumph

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Christina May Shanaberg
Christina May Shanaberg

Mount Vernon, OH



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I am a former member of North Shore Writers' Guild in Willoughby OH. I have had numerous poems published and letters. I am, currently, working on a screen play that I hope will interest my cousin-in.. more..

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