What Kind of Life

Everyone knows what is best for me, but it doesn't agree with what I want for me!

What Kind of Life

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

What kind of life would I have

To listen and try to behave;

I've been listening to unknowing,

Trying to give them a showing.

 

Don't you want to see whom I am,

Devoid of your hopes' diaphragm;

I am, sadly, all that I can really be;

Someone no one can seem to see.

 

I don't want to be whom I was,

Lost in last year's ugly buzz;

I am whom I have grown into

For me, only, and not for you.

 

If I don't prove good enough,

Well, that for you is rough;

'Cause I'm tired of being a round "Peg,"

Trying to fit in a square hole for "Peg."

 

 

 

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I found myslef stumbleing through this piece to the very end wich actually made the whole piece work for me. Once I reached the square hole I felt much like a round peg myself. All the ruff bummpy edges of the piece where smoothed out and I found that like a round peg I just don't fit into the square hole. Nice!

[Jamie S.]

Love this piece! It reminded me of a rough patch in my life several years back and the pride I had in myself for the self improvements I had to make. Thank you for sharing :)

[Barbara Walker]

The intent of your piece is applaudable. We all have to be ourselves, but that's difficult when trying to please others. The word choice, diaphragm, did you mean diagram? Would make more sense to me, but it is your poem and you know what you wanted to say.

[Daytonight]

Very well done! I love the last two lines best. Keep on penning.

[Black Cat Fever]

Excellent write. It never works when we try to be what others want us to be. Eventually the person will rebel and that rebellion doesn't always have the best ending. I enjoyed this.

[Augustus]

This is a nice poem and I agree with the sentiments. We must indeed be what we are and be what we want to be and not what others want us to be. Of course, others might have a point at times, and me must give it some thought, but we can't change ourselves for them blindly.
I agree with Ethan...the third stanza is the best, for me too.

[Susie Q]

As a parent, we hope our children will acheive their dreams and desires and find happiness along the way. If we see someone that may not be a good influence or can make their life miserable it is hard to see but they need to handle it their way. We may have more wisdom over our many years but parents make mistakes, too. Grown children just need to learn from their mistakes and do not repeat them or fall into a hole they have dug for themself.

[James Darrow]

The third stanza, to me, was what gripped me.

"I don't want to be whom I was,
Lost in last year's ugly buzz;
I am whom I have grown into
For me, only, and not for you."

Those lines are what I think we should all take to heart; be who we are, for ourselves and no one else. If others take comfort with who we are and cheer us on, all the better, but not for us to bow to the ever changing expectations of others. Overall, extremely well done Christina, this read is much appreciated. :)

[Dream Weaver]

Everyone should be themselves, not
what others think they should be...
You should always be you and let
others be themselves.. nIcely done.

[TPK Stories]

Good...sometimes I can relate to this....