Sinking In

If I had taken a different road, would this grey stone not stand?
Would the eulogies methodically written be undone by destiny's hand?
If I had dared to skip while the rest had walked, would it have changed my fate?
Is the future spindled up in a web, or is it a web we spiders create?
If I had had the will to risk all for love, would love have spared my life?
Would love have stopped to think twice?
If I had screamed when a room was silent and someone stopped to ask why,
Would I now not being explaining the reason I had to die?
If I had gotten up where I had fallen, if I had gone left instead of right,
The what-if's compile together, parallel to Frost's poetic plight.
Ah, the road not taken is my greatest fear, for the thing of which I am afraid
Is whether or not it would have been different had I gone the other way.

Author's Note

Another poem written by my freshman self

Reviews

[Phantom Heart]

I really enjoyed reading this; it is right up my alley. I loved all the second-guessing in each line. The road not taken is filled with a promise so different from our lives today it is boggles the mind. But I was wondering why exactly two lines have no "second-guessing" in them. "Would love have stopped to think twice?" and "Would I now be explaining the reason I had to die?" seem to be more stand alone or even a "third-guess" added to the doubt. They are great lines and I'd keep them but I would also try to fit them into the "second-guessing" form you established throughout the rest of the poem. Now that's all just my opinion anyway.

[Emily B]

Contentment
is hard to explain
either way
we are.

This is a compelling write. It brought out the devil's advocate in me. :)

[Gandré]

fast-paced and with a bit of sadness, I try not to use those "ifs", they let me think in circles, but can we just delete them? perhaps I shall stop thinking .. or I shall I try to guess my future before I take a step? This made me thinking.. great poem!

[Markymark]

Now this my friend is what I like to read. Mention Frost, and I get excited. This is a great read, but is it an entertainment poem, or heartfelt? It reminds me of a non-rhyming poem I wrote "A walk in the grave yard" It needs an edit, and tightening up. But it's in it's raw state on my wall. Check it out. Us poets think alike...Huh? Thanks for sharing this.

Markymark

[Drew Wade]

I like your poem better than frost's. I know that's not saying much, but I'm not a good reviewer of poems.

[Gathering_Stars]

Thank you for your review.
I tried to implement the second guessing feature throughout, but it didn't always end up on the next line, some of it is within the original line, if that makes sense : )