I'm Here For Your Entertainment

Damn, I suck...

Dancing, always dancing like a monkey
I am here in the moment things feel great
then shoot it down like a little play toy
crashing down the joy I falsely built for you

Dancing, just dancing again with my cymbals
this time not for you, but for me
in hopes that I will catch your attention
crashing, not the percussion but my chance of luck

My dancing gets old, now I feel how you felt
the ignorance in my feet kick at their selves
I thought for myself and not for you
I just wish all my life to see that feeling you felt

Just one more time, that's all I care
chance at that kiss, shot to my heart
That feeling that I didn't feel
but it's now all I want

Sit on my lap once more
Give me a hug that means
the fun we use to have
a condition truly free

Make this come true and we will really be happy
trust me to make this come true
I no longer want to be here for your entertainment
all I want is you, and for us to have something that we meant...

Author's Note

Tell me if the poem has emotion... let me know if what you think...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

It does indeed have emotion and shows it in every stanza. There are so many feelings wrapped up in your words.. and the end is wonderful

You've created some great lines: ' Dancing, just dancing again with my cymbals / this time not for you, but for me / in hopes that I will catch your attention / crashing, not the percussion but my chance of luck' AND
'I no longer want to be here for your entertainment / all I want is you, and for us to have something that we meant...' certainly emotion there, very certainly

Thank you so much for sharing.

[fallendemonofmercy]

I no longer want to be here for your entertainment
all I want is you, and for us to have something that we meant...

to me this write sort of conveys a certain depth of what some people take advantage of and when they see the light and want what they eventually lost
this does have emotion - and i think this is from a mans perspective
i realized this when the character was begging their lover to be back in his arms
it was a refreshing write anyway