Sniffles

Simple rhyme, silly words, and a sucky day

Blowing my filthy nose;

it seems like a fire hose!

A mound of dirty tissues shows my infection,

though passersby may get the wrong impression.

Pain in throat and nostril.

The image is rather hostile.

I hope I don't look like Death,

but I'm not holding my breath.

Just when I was done feeling blue,

The universe hands me a big "screw you".

Author's Note

Just poking a little fun at my sickness. Feel free to read and review.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This short little ditty is very imaginative, realistic, & vivid! Just enuf snot to get your point across effectively! *smile* Maybe it's baby-sitting that little bundle of joy nephew, since kids seem to carry more germs & viruses that we loners don't get exposed to very often, so our immune systems may not be as robust as people who are around lots of people & kids & germs all the time! I hope this bout didn't last long & you have put the tissue box away by now! (((HUGS)))

[Jacob Clifford]

Sickness has been going around lately, and my entire family has gotten hit pretty hard. I wrote this poem during the worst part of my sickness, but it just refuses to die. I've had a runny nose and a dry/scratchy throat for a week. It's been a pain, but it could be much worse.

[James]

I love the ending because that's just what it feels like too. It sucks.

Nice poem.

[Jacob Clifford]

Thank you, James. It certainly does suck.

[Relic]

There's nothing worse than those sniffles and the universe's disregard for our well-being. Lord knows I've been there. Lots of water and green tea will help. When we get dehydrated, the mean spirits of sickness and sniffles moves in pronto for their attack.

Besides that, this was fun to read. :)

[Jacob Clifford]

Thanks for the advice, Relic. I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Ana Papaya]

Poor you, sucks to have the sniffles. I guess its allergy season again?

[Jacob Clifford]

I think it is allergy season, yes. I'm pretty sure I got the sniffles from my sister; she was *very* sick a few days ago. So far, my symptoms aren't as bad as hers were, but only time will tell, I suppose. Thank you for reading, Papaya.

[Ana Papaya]

Shall I pray for you then? :)

[Jacob Clifford]

Haha, I suppose it couldn't hurt.

[Ana Papaya]

Done! :)

[Shannon]

Silly is right. Nicely balanced though.

"A mound of dirty tissues shows my infection,
though passersby may get the wrong impression"

Very clever!

[Jacob Clifford]

I'm glad you liked those lines. That's my favorite couplet, too. Thanks for reading.

[Bacchus]

LOL
so great.
colds do seem like fus.
great fun, and super relate able

[Jacob Clifford]

Thanks, Bacchus. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.