A Crack in the Hole

I cry
Every night
Thinking I'll make it right

My soul aches for more
As my heart begins to soar

Yet the same thing crashes me down
Making my depression rise again

I try my best to fit in
But it never seems to be quite right

Somethings missing or
I do something wrong

But that's just me?
Isn't it?

The One always wrong
The One when almost perfect isn't enough

One mistake and it's the end of the world
One crack is all they need

Imagine what they would think if they saw the hole
The hole in what they thought I was

I'm not the me they wanted
I'm not the me they raised

I'm broken and shattered
Stuck in my cage

I can't fly
I have no wings

My happiness
Stuck to the ground

As gravity
Of reality

Kicks in
I realize

I'm going to drown

Author's Note

Uh opinions are good:) not my usual style haha

Reviews

[Kelsey Schadt]

This is a thought-provoking piece about the pressures we put on ourselves. One suggestion is that anytime you use the word things or a version of it, you replace with a more precise word. I believe this could make this piece of writing more meaningful

[Angela Sparks]

Thank you:) I will try doing that. I'm glad you got the gist of it though. I wasn't quite sure it was very clear but I guess that leaves to some abstract thought. Thank you for your review:) I really appreciate it

[Coyote Poetry]

A bad place to be if you are a free bird.
"I can't fly
I have no wings"
No-one liked to be locked up or in. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the logical ending. Thank you Angela for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Angela Sparks]

Thank you for your review :3

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Captain Rilen]

Depression seems to feed off of itself, and that's what makes it so dangerous. Somewhat like the snowball effect, negative thoughts can attract more negative thoughts, each one building in severity. Good work, like thoughts laid out in writing.

[Broken Serenity]

This is a very relatable poem. People definitely tend to expect something out of others or have some predetermined idea of their personality which can lead to that person putting pressure on themselves. So when you can't live up to all the expectations of what society expected you to be it can be rather unraveling. It was interesting how you used rhyme at the beginning and at the end, it kind of made the rhymed stanzas more impactful than the others. Also you used the word 'wrong' twice very close to each other, in the future I'd suggest to try to come up with a synonym to the word. Your repetition of certain phrases made the poem a lot more powerful and convey your feelings stronger. Thanks for sharing!

[Angela Sparks]

Thank you:) I will keep that in mind. I'm glad you understood the poem so well

[Angela Sparks]

Thank you so much:) that is very truueee

[AaronFreitas]

I love the way you express yourself... so much honesty and you detail those feelings in a deep way. Nice work Angela :) Hope all is well

[Angela Sparks]

Haha yea I guess everything is okay:) it's just a lot easier to write about the bad feelings I guess :) thank you. I'm glad you liked it ^.^

[AaronFreitas]

Always is :)

[Robert]

This a sad poem of one revealing through their words the pain and struggles they go through on a daily basis. The frustration of people not understanding who they are or how they feel. Maybe the poem would have been written differently if maybe they spoke their true feeling to one of these friends than maybe they would get some understanding and comfort back from these friends. Also I believe everyone should be who they are and not try to be someone else. In other words don't try to fit in, just be yourself. Some people might not like that but there are plenty that will like the "real you". This was heart telling but life is always changing, so soon it could be for the better.

[Angela Sparks]

Thank you:) it was, and can be very hard to be yourself. Everybody thinks you should be themselves, it's just some find it hard to live in that belief. Thank you so much for this wonderful review

[Robert]

Sorry for the typos, I was on my phone. I edited it so it reads better.