Sky Dove

Ode to Dove I saw one evening

 Sky Dove

 

The sky dove flies

From east to south

The sky dove is a hero

The other bird love the sky dove

The clouds are his friend

The wind his Ally

I love the shy dove

Faster then the Eagle

The mocking bird is his part time lover

Full time friend

Sometime enemy

For the sky dove knows my insides

He's from the sky

He prays for me because while playing chess with the angles

He whispers in Gods right ear

Whispers for me

He weeps for my troubles

The little tears hit my nose

And drip to my chin

Like warm rain

The sky dove weeps for me

For he sees my future

He was written about my past

I hate the sky dove

He is so much better then me

Out of all the avian to swim the clouds

He is the most loyal

I throw golden confetti

I throw silver

I throw diamonds

He ignores them

He only wants my friendship

I offer him the diamonds again

My friendship is worthless

Reviews

[Sarah]

What a unique & breathtaking piece! Excellent description and symbolism! I loved the lines "The mocking bird is his part time lover." and "He whispers in Gods right ear." The ending is fascinating as well - at first the bird only wants your friendship and then, when he is tempted with the diamonds again, he takes those instead. XD Lovely poem, I liked it a lot! ^___^

[WatashLegend]

wonderful write and yay to the integrity and honor of the sky dove for not taking the diamonds :)

[TJ]

you have such a masterful skill of using language
bravo

[Rayne Stanton]

beautifully written :)

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

The lines from "He whispers in Gods right ear." to "Like warm rain." really struck me as beautiful. This is very creative, too. In some places, the periods seemed weird and disruptive to the flow of the poem, though.

[Lily Mae]

A very interesting write.. I could picture this clearly as you wrote on.. perfect..x

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The sky dove is painted as popular, but I do not see him that way; he may be well liked by many, but I think he is pompous. Maybe I’m confused by what you mean here; I’d love to know the meaning behind this piece if you’re up for disclosing.

[Veronica Chandler]

Very interesting and there is a distinct push and pull making for a wonderful piece.

[Sweet Emotions]

This is nice. This line, "He he’s then from the sky." I'm not sure what you mean to say. Typo, perhaps? I like the personification of the dove, and the imagery of the clouds.

[unknown]

Wow very interesting, i felt a bit of sorrow in this .... nice poem!