Everyone Know God with a Gun in Their Mouth

Since I moved to LA everyone one believes in something new. I once argued with a filmmaker who said there was no God, he believed in energy. This is for all the people believing in everything--

Everyone Knows God with a Gun in their Mouth

 

Judas wept.

The C**k crowed three times.

The funeral bell chimed.

 

He said he was Catholic.

Everyone laughed and said he was sick.

For these people who followed the man with the funny hat.

Had three Gods.

Told sins to each other

and worshipped Jesus mother.

 

Then he said he was Agnostic.

 He believed

There was a force was higher.

But his belief in a quote “UN” quote God he would retire.

He said he worshipped Bubba, the chubby little Indian price.

Since India was mostly Hindu I guess they have not seen him since.

He called to Jehovah.

Kirishna.

Did a stint with Kabala.

Was at peace with the Transcendentalist.

Then L Ron and the Scientologists.

Then with it all he got really pissed.

“He said forget it all”

“I’m an Atheist”

 

For this was a thrill.

He would always resign.

That we were not created from Perfect design.

He had such a thrill,

when he would fight to take God of the dollar bill.

“Take god out of everything”

He would shout and sing.

Well one faithful night.

While walking on Main street going south,

 he was thrown to the ground and had a Desert Eagle stuck in is mouth.

Guess whose name he called out.

 

 

Author's Note

I started out doing rhyming poetry. I used to battle in ciphers. a friend suggest non rhyming because he thought I was hiding. I fell in love with Non Rhyming poetry. I am going to post my older stuff up revisiting the form I started with.

Reviews

[Judas Hammer]

Krishna is spelled correct, it's a religious movement after Hare Krishna. If some find "Chubby little Indian Prince" insulting: I'm sure they will recover, it was meant with not harm. Thanks for suggestions, you have the makings of a nice poem.

Of course it did not upset me, thats what the forum is for. Suggestions noted

[razormuse]

When reading someones writing, I'm not one to point out spelling or grammar issues that's just not my gig as I suck at grammar. I loved the poem it was engaging & hit the nail on the head. The various Religious references were what pulled this altogether for me. Great poem.

[KIMBERLY]

walk with faith and you will find the answer without finding it anymore ;) no need for religion, just need personal connection with God :)

[KIMBERLY]

while I was reading this, it made me sing like rapper ;) cooland seriously, very nice article

[Barbara Walker]

I like Bukowski, too! There are a few grammar errors and misspellings in here, but the intent of your poem is crystal clear. This piece flows well, too. I hear there are no atheists in foxholes, too.

[Amelie]

Smashing! I like the cold, witty tone. And of course the tie back, twas whip-smart. Freudian slips aren't fancy most of the time.

[Elle M.]

There's a few things I found I would like to point out...
You spelled Krishna wrong and Krishna is usually associated with children try Ganesha he's more of a God associated with over coming obstacles (such as death). And the Buddha was not a "chubby little Indian Prince" he was a wise man. I suggest changing "Chubby little Indian Price" because some might find it insulting.
I hope I helped a little and I'm sorry if I made you upset with my suggestions.
- Ayla

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this story the second time around. Men find God when death is near. Always a pleasure to read your words.
Coyote

[YouoweYoupay]

I feel the struggle too. Of defining and framing the 'whatness' of the supreme being. This poem strongly reminds me of the story of the atheist men aboard a ship. When the sea and wind roared in rage, every one of them declared their trust in God and prayed, and they retreated from their faith once the ship was saved and they had reached the shores.

There were words and terms I was not familiar with. Perhaps I need to read more about deities in India and elsewhere. But, really, what an earth-shaking write. Stirrs lots of hearts, lots of contreversies. We are hypocrites. God is there only when we need to cling to life. I will share this. Thank you for the request.

[GamingGal]

I love this!!! This poem is veeeeerrrryyyyy powerful and amazing. The middle part after he decides to be Atheist is my favorite. Apart from the end, that is. The end made me laugh so hard. I find it hilarious that someone can be Atheist, but call out to a god when their life is on the line.