The Renegade Continued

Just a happy sequel and callback to one of my first poems.

The renegade was an outlaw

But the years passed

And no longer is he blinded by the fortune and popularity he sought

We found a loophole

Both of us turned into a villian for a short while

Coulda swore you sold your soul

But remembering the feeling of rain down a pixie cut

Echoes of an abandoned chamber calling

I knew this was the right thing

Every night, late train

Not quite as loud as my pain

The golden coast

Denied I loved it the most

I've never felt this relief

The aches are unknotted and gone

I can finally sleep 

When everything was it's darkest

I still thought of you

Every night in my dreams

You were there

And now we're here

I'm no longer alone

New year and clean rain and blurry dreams

Stardust came back to me

I'm coming home.

Author's Note

I didn't think I'd ever write a happy sequel to one of my first and favorite poems, but here we are. I'm really happy with it, and keep an eye out for my upcoming story on this site soon! Most of my poetry is all based around that universe, and I hope your keeping safe and doing alright during this time. Don't forget to stay hydrated and take care of yourself!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

In most cases, a couple enjoys a long relationship only becuz they are determined to make it thru those messy years when things feel crummy half the time. Sometimes we find out that being lovers was a mistake but we can't let go of being friends. Or maybe we have to re-define a relationship a few times over the years. This poem conveys the comfort we find with a person once we hack thru all the brambles of misplaced expectations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you! It seems I was able to convey the message pretty clearly it seems, and I'm very happy about that! Thank you so, so much for the kind review, and you really did hit the nail on the head!

[Poetic Beauty]

Sounds like a journey through life with its ups and downs chasing after money to realize it wasn’t what you were after it was love all along. Just my thoughts

[Vertigo Cat1111]

You described it perfecty! Thank you so much for checking it out and reviewing it, I really do appreciate it.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. This poem had a great story and was insightful on making the things that matter the most come first

[Betty Hermelee]

Many people become renegades, I guess to figure out their lives,futures, but inevitable they return to "normalcy" because it's hard to not be in love . It's such a relief!!!
Great!
Best, Betty

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for the kind review! It really hit the nail on the head, so thank you so much.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!

[Michelle Lauren]

Love the journey and style of your prose. There comes a time in every writers’ path of which they find themselves wishing that they had written a line from a work of art; this is one of those times for me .... ‘echoes of an abandoned chamber calling’ and ‘new year and clean rain and blurry dreams’ .... simply sublime and astounding. .....

be safe xo

Michelle Lauren

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you! This review means so much to me and I have those moments of wishing I wrote something so much, so it means a lot that someone appreciates my favorite lines, too. (: I hope you stay safe too!

[duff]

This made me smile. Listening to a certain band fit perfectly at the time.

"Every night, late train
Not quite as loud as my pain"

Love that line.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you! I'm so glad to make someone smile, that's always what I've wanted, or at least for someone to feel a bit of relatability. And I love when the music your listening to matches up perfectly. I'd love to know what band!

[duff]

I think I was listening to the latest Deftones album.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Oh, I think I've heard of them, I'll have to check them out!

[Coyote Poetry]

It is cool when we can find peace again.
"I've never felt this relief
The aches are unknotted and gone
I can finally sleep"
The above lines. I do understand. I liked the emotional ride in your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I guess its all up to interpretation, haha but thank you so very much I always appreciate your reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes it is and you are welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

'stardust cane back to me'. A happy finale Colacat. I like those endings best of all. This poem took me on your journey, through a troublesome and painful dark period. The train is now out of the dark tunnel. How content that must make you. Well worth persevering I would say. Good to read you.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much, and I have to agree. I love happy endings most of all too. Content is a great word, and I appreciate the review endlessly. (: