Chlorine In The Black Coffee

Chlorine In The Black Coffee

A Poem by Colacat
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'Used to be one of the rotten ones and I liked you for that.'- Broken Social Scene.

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Wake up
To white picket fences
How do I
Keep getting into this messes?
You run through the midnight roses
Looking for a home
But soon enough, they grow thorns
Chlorine in the pool
Does loving you make me a fool?
The air conditoner on
You promised to follow each day
But you gave my night sky heart away
Glitter shimmering on the uneasy floor
The cat pushes it's way into the door
If we beat them to the front
We beat them back again
Then maybe one day
We can be friends
And it won't have to end
Give me back
Your black hotel coffee lists
You're the one I miss
Sunday car on the highway
Going to make haunted ride water memories
We drove through the canyons
But you were the only sight I was seeing
Quiet curtain calls and barn wishes
Do your worst
Give me stitches
Is rhyming and metaphors what my life will be?
You were my biggest grand plan
But without you, I crumble into sand

© 2021 Colacat


Author's Note

Colacat
I really love writing poetry based on my stories. This one is based on one of the sequel stories to LA Devotee, which I actually miss quite a bit. It may come back, you never know! Also, expect plenty of poems coming! I've been on a huge poetry writing spree. Have a wonderful day!

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I love the juxtaposition of your words; seems like someone took your heart and threw it away, at least for a while, but you wouldn’t mind being friends again; the way you structured the poem is really excellent…. You are deriding , but hoping to love again at least have part of it.
Well done!
Best, B.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Colacat

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it, thank you. (:



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Posted 1 Month Ago


I love the juxtaposition of your words; seems like someone took your heart and threw it away, at least for a while, but you wouldn’t mind being friends again; the way you structured the poem is really excellent…. You are deriding , but hoping to love again at least have part of it.
Well done!
Best, B.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Colacat

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it, thank you. (:
That was a sad poem :( The emotions were beautifully described. Especially in the last line "Without you I crumble into sand". I also liked the part about riding through the canyons but only having eyes for the loved one.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Colacat

1 Month Ago

Hey, thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it so much. (:
Shelley Warner

1 Month Ago

You're welcome.
I really love the imagery in this...and it reminded me of that song..."If lovin' you is wrong, I don't wanna be right!"
Excellent piece with lots of emotion tugging at its sleeve.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Colacat

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much! Yes, I did indeed have that song in mind at one part, haha! Have a wonderful day!
You were my biggest grand plan
But without you I crumble into sand

Life is like that. It has a habit of kicking you in the teeth. Your lovely sand castles are lost when the tide comes in. Such a tone of disappointment here Colacat.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Colacat

2 Months Ago

Yes, life is often very cruel like that, unfortunately. Thank you so much for the review!
Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Just read a second time and the imagery really stood out for me :)
A good read.
Colacat

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much again! I'm very happy you enjoyed it. (:
Wishful thinking and longing mixed in with everyday routines.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Colacat

2 Months Ago

That’s just about right! Thank you so much for the review. (:

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