The White Death

The White Death

A Poem by ca.shorty
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The White Death comes once a year
Everything dies, along with me I fear
Parents shed tears
And trees leaves are shedding near

The White Death is right after fall
Children no longer play with a ball
Trees are not looking so tall
I’d better go inside
Winter is coming and death has sent its call

The White Death is taking me with it
I’m colder than the snow by just a bit
No more Christmas just wait and sit
My time has come winter came with a big hit

The White Death takes me on the ice one last time
All I can do is sit and rhyme
I hear my mom call for me and our clocks chime
I ignore her for I know, my life has reached its time

© 2018 ca.shorty


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ca.shorty
Hope you enjoy. Please write reviews I need feedback.

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Eviewing again because this is awesome! This edited version really sticks with you. I get the chilling (no pun intended) aurora that something is come to get you. Symbolized by winter and by that we can guess what happens. We know something bads around the corner. It seems a bit sinister and yet beautiful. Yay for winter!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


ca.shorty

5 Years Ago

Yw. And thx 4 the review before really appreciate it
LazerRays

5 Years Ago

:D no problem
I liked the beginning a lot, ominousness. But then it sorta got sloppy and didn't stay with the tone... It's a nice timeline about the white death killing things but them you go off topic with Santa getting you stuff... You should probably find a stanza to tie the two together. You have the "a time when Santa comes" and you flip the poem into a totally different poem... Keep on track please... That's not really enough to tie Santa to death. O.o

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


ca.shorty

5 Years Ago

Just fixed it 4 u
ca.shorty

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much

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Added on November 10, 2018
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