the great could-be

the great could-be

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
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a prayer to our maybe-god.

"
our perhaps-father,
who art maybe in heaven,
hallowed be thy ambiguous name.
forgive us sort-of sinners,
o great could-be,
and bless us
with the warmth
of our bullshit savior
"saving"
our cement and neon light hearts.

forgive us, please,
great lord of maybe.
save for us a place in heaven
next to your shameful throne
of tomorrow's broken promise.

amen.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


Author's Note

Daniel Atkinson
Another one that's been on my mind for a while. A sarcastic prayer to God is something that I find humorous but thought-provoking.

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"our cement and neon light hearts."
I can see it. Your sarcasm is piercing and comical at the same time. I congratulate you in your ability to say what many can't figure how to put into words.

and I think it's funny that the add on the page, while I read this, is for a Christian Prayer Center where you can post prayer requests.

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Very well written Cole

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Wow, that's nice! Reminds me of my one little anecdote, "Politically Correct Jesus." I'd suggest reading it on my blog, but I don't wanna prostitute myself.

Anyways, I really enjoyed this bit of poetic satire. Very nice.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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"our cement and neon light hearts."
I can see it. Your sarcasm is piercing and comical at the same time. I congratulate you in your ability to say what many can't figure how to put into words.

and I think it's funny that the add on the page, while I read this, is for a Christian Prayer Center where you can post prayer requests.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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love it. for many, many reasons. but not least because you posted on a sunday.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sarcastic prayer, now this I love, a reverent who's that of the supernatural and unseen, well written and caustic, well done, great read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

DULUTH, GA



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