the sunset keeper

the sunset keeper

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
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my poem for the "title a week" group.

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i see you,
sunset keeper--
the fickle moon blade
inches from your lovely throat.
sweating tears
and bleeding rain,
i guess you feel
like god's favorite w***e.

i can help you.

love me,
sunset keeper,
and i'll show you a sunrise.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


Author's Note

Daniel Atkinson
This one's really abstract. I just took things that sounded nice and put them together. There's no meaning behind it.

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sometimes just letting the creative flow take you wherever it may works so well! I like that you didnt go on and on... sometimes less is more, especially when being abstract!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It may be abstract, but it worked. There were some wonderful descriptive little stanza's in this write. Good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"i guess you feel
like god's favorite w***e."

What piercing line that attacks the ego and self-esteem of the 'sunset keeper'
Although you may have put no meaning behind it, I'm sure many people will find it heavy with depth.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

drops of word pearls~ gorgeous array~ well placed reactive composition~

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

interesting...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I don't see how a d***o would be offensive to Him. I think He has bigger things to worry about than some kid asserting that He uses sex toys. Just saying.

Anyways, your poetry is always way too deep for me to get, so I guess it's good.

100

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i think the d***o part is offensive to God...I would remove it...I rate it a zero for now because of that bm

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 22, 2011
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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

Atlanta, GA



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