Defiant

Defiant

A Poem by Colton Warr
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Sometimes we have to be Defiant in order to obtain freedom...

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Defiant

A Poem by Colton Warr


Your will be done, as I come undone

You fail to see it, she is the one

But your way is true, your way is right

I am sorry, but I can no longer stand by your side

 

Your will be done, as I come undone

Can I be honest? All I want is to run

You reject and rebuild the way you see fit

I am sorry, but I will no longer submit

 

Your will be done, as I come undone

I am exhausted, has this only just begun?

I tried to keep everything together

I am sorry, I can no longer tread this stormy weather

 

My declaration be heard, my defiance be heard

My chains forever unshackled and burned

My life is mine to live

I am sorry, but I no longer need you in it  

© 2014 Colton Warr


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Freedom is good but it always come with a price, for one must first sacrifice something in order to gain freedom. For one can be released of his/her pain but the process of breaking your shackles is a hellish nightmare. I feel that you had it rough while you were writing this. For your words made a strong and determined impact on my heart. I really liked this poem, for I was in comparable state once. The thirst for freedom was tormenting but when salvation was reached, my heart became much lighter, for it had dropped the weight that suppressed my freedom and happiness. This poem is a masterpiece.

Good job :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

You're exactly right, freedom always comes at a price. Sometimes that price takes a toll on you. As .. read more
Nightfeather

4 Years Ago

You are right and thank you for sharing this epic poem with the world :)
You get so much more effect out of those last two lines than most of the rest of the poem, I wonder if the rhyme scheme in the earlier stanzas is holding you back. I like three repetitions, though. I feel like that almost matches those final lines.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate the read and review! You may be correct about those rhyme.. read more
If anything speaks to the title of this poem, it's the last line. It's empowering yet filled with an underlying pain. Even though other lines begin with "I am sorry," something that tells me that the speaker does feel sorrow for the loss, but has had to make a choice for his/her own benefit ("I no longer need you in it"). Like "An Undelivered Poem," you mention a "she" just once, and I take that to be a glimpse of who the speaker has chosen to separate from, but the focus is indeed on the speaker. I enjoyed this poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, David! I'm happy you enjoyed this piece and especially the last line! I'm glad yo.. read more
Those last two lines are especially heartbreaking, making them the perfect ending to this piece. It sounds to me as if the persona is talking to God and telling Him all these things, am I correct? In any case, wonderful writing. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Maja! I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece, especially the ending like that. I appr.. read more
Maja

4 Years Ago

Ohhhhh. Well, I understand. Good to know you're independent now! :) And you're welcome. :)
good thought provoking reading...the emotion is powerful and in a way healing...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you could feel the emotion and I.. read more
Great poem. I could feel the emotion as I read it. Good work

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I'm glad you could feel the emotion within eac.. read more
WordShaker33

4 Years Ago

Of course! I was happy to read such a good piece of writing
You capture a controlled and articulate defiance in this piece Colton.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you, John! Sometimes in life we must be defiant to someone or something that is holding us bac.. read more
This reads almost like a song for me. As I read it a melody played in my head and I sang along. Loved it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I agree, it does kind of read like a song! Perhaps I should see if someone I kn.. read more
Reading through a few of your poems - I'm jealous of the way poetry seems to come so naturally to you!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Freda! Your words are so kind! I appreciate you saying that! I'm glad you like .. read more
good way to break up and take a revange! strong words, could hurt deeply if aimed right!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Helena! Sometimes, when the heart spills out, it hurts people. But we must learn .. read more

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Tags: Love, Hate, Family, Freedom, Chains, Defiance

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Colton Warr

Richmond, VA



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