A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Poem by Colton Warr
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The water was rushing in...

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A Note in a Bottle Part II 
A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done
What's in the past is in the past
But thinking and missing you
Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 
It would haunt you to know 
I've been where you are 
When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 
Do you think that we are dead? 
Your answer means the world to me
Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me
Their whispers washing me away from you 
The weight of the sea was crushing
The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men
Well perhaps that is the case
Would you like to know my vexing?  
Just a glimpse of your darling face 
 
The water was rushing in 
I had to abandon ship 
You may never forgive me 
That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

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The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 
A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 
My heart reaches out for you
Into my mind you have crept 
Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 
My eyes see a shimmering sight
Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 
You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 
They encircle me as if welcoming me in 
The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 
It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 
With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 
I am not dead but I cannot breathe 
I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

© 2015 Colton Warr


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dan
Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

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Colton Warr

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Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothin.. read more



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Wow. Your poem is amazing. Your word choice set a perfect mood, and it certainly contains a lot of tangible emotion. Well done!

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and could f.. read more
Your penmanship is quite remarkable I must say. Keep up the good work Colton

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Terrence! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and I apprec.. read more
Terrence Chang

4 Years Ago

Your welcome and it was my pleasure
I absolutely love The Man at the Bottom of The Sea. I think it's extremely clever the juxtaposition of the two end verses. It all evokes a powerful image and its so clever to compare love and grieving to a feeling of drowning or being at a dark space of mind. There's lots you can take from this, i think.
And i normally don't like poetry but this is so lovely.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Bella! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, especially the final part. That final p.. read more
This poem was so deep that I had trouble to see it. Just kidding but your poem has made me smile and cry at the same time. You are really gifted, for you have written another god-tier poem. Your poems should be used by culture teachers all around the world to bestow your brilliance in their students minds. Reading your poems makes me always hungry for more. When I have more time available, all your poems shall be read by me for they are so beautiful and must be read. I will say this in every review, for it is the undeniable truth. You are man with great talent, so never stop writing.

Good job :D

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I am seriously so grateful for the words that you write to me about these pieces!.. read more
Nightfeather

4 Years Ago

No problem, your deserve it :)
Beautiful in images that flow through both these poems;]

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked these two poems! Thanks for stopping by and checking them out!.. read more
I have read a few of your pieces and each time it is like I feel I cannot breath. The vivid imagery you create brings the reader to their knees feeling the pain. Trapped with regret and heartbreak. Thank you for the great read.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you are able to feel the pain and emotion within my words. .. read more
you have made the essence of affection possible to smell.

great write Colton.

like it.

:)

Thanks for sharing.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for the kind words! I appreciate you gi.. read more
Irenic

4 Years Ago

welcome...................:)
Every piece of yours I have read are always very addicting. I just can't stop writing. I assume your cfuture career in writing is going to be very bright.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Olivia! Your words are too kind! I'm happy that you enjoy my writings so much! .. read more
This was really good. I was instantly roped in and could not stop reading. :)

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping.. read more
to be honest it is the long ride of emotions ,tender mix of deep inner feeling, i could never stop it reading again and again impressive... enjoyed reading it great work... keep smiling :)

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! I appreciate the kind and positive wo.. read more

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Tags: Love, Hate, A Note in a Bottle, The Sea, Waves, Ocean, Relationship, Guilt, Regret, Bottom, Poetry, Life, Memory, Romance, Hope, Desperation

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Richmond, VA



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