A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Poem by Colton Warr
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The water was rushing in...

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A Note in a Bottle Part II 
A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done
What's in the past is in the past
But thinking and missing you
Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 
It would haunt you to know 
I've been where you are 
When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 
Do you think that we are dead? 
Your answer means the world to me
Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me
Their whispers washing me away from you 
The weight of the sea was crushing
The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men
Well perhaps that is the case
Would you like to know my vexing?  
Just a glimpse of your darling face 
 
The water was rushing in 
I had to abandon ship 
You may never forgive me 
That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

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The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 
A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 
My heart reaches out for you
Into my mind you have crept 
Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 
My eyes see a shimmering sight
Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 
You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 
They encircle me as if welcoming me in 
The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 
It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 
With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 
I am not dead but I cannot breathe 
I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

© 2015 Colton Warr


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dan
Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

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Colton Warr

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Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothin.. read more



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Wow, your imagination is remarkable, you held me spellbound the through both poems,
Your verbiage is excellent and your never die romanticism is enthralling...this was a very
emotive and great metaphorical piece. I absolutely fell in love with the close on part 11,
you have an uncanny ability to draw your reader in a make them feel what you write,
beautiful penning....LOve, Sheryl

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Sheryl! I appreciate the kind words! You are too sweet! Your words of encourageme.. read more
Sheryl

4 Years Ago

It was My Pleasure Colton, I'm looking forward to many more reads
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that was deep man, good one

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for stopping by and checking i.. read more
Epic Write Excellent imagery. Well thought, Very good!

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Andrew! I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! Thanks for giving it a read!
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This is beautifully written!

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for giving it a read!
lovesrgraham

4 Years Ago

No problem. Anytime!
This is truly beautiful. I love your imagery, the way you tell your story. Fantastic. :)

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Jacklyn! I appreciate the kind words! I'm happy you liked this one! Thanks for .. read more
Jacklyn

4 Years Ago

No problem:)
Extremely well written...keep it up!!!

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Esha! I'm glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for reading!
Leslie Philbert encapsulates these verses so well.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, John! I'm happy you agree with his comments and enjoyed the piece! Thanks for g.. read more
Excellent quatrains here, fine rhymes...this all fits amd work, you write very well.

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Leslie! I appreciate the kind and encouraging words! Thank you for giving this a .. read more
This couldn't be more perfect.
-H

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for stopping by and checking it out!
Hello Colton,

Good job, especially the lines starting from 'the waves...' to '...you knew.' So many qualities can be attributed to the sea.

Regards, Sesame

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Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you liked this one! The sea is one of my favorite things to.. read more

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Tags: Love, Hate, A Note in a Bottle, The Sea, Waves, Ocean, Relationship, Guilt, Regret, Bottom, Poetry, Life, Memory, Romance, Hope, Desperation

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