A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Note in a Bottle Part II/The Man at the Bottom of The Sea

A Poem by Colton Warr
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The water was rushing in...

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A Note in a Bottle Part II 
A Poem by Colton Warr

What's done is done
What's in the past is in the past
But thinking and missing you
Is something that I cannot get passed 

I shouldn't have said that 
It would haunt you to know 
I've been where you are 
When the sun sets you feel so alone 

I can see us losing blood 
Do you think that we are dead? 
Your answer means the world to me
Since that day, I have bled 

The waves crashed down upon me
Their whispers washing me away from you 
The weight of the sea was crushing
The darkness of the bottom, if only you knew

They say the sea vexes all men
Well perhaps that is the case
Would you like to know my vexing?  
Just a glimpse of your darling face 
 
The water was rushing in 
I had to abandon ship 
You may never forgive me 
That doesn't mean we still can't save it 

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The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 
A Poem by Colton Warr 

As my soul sinks to the darkest of depths 
My heart reaches out for you
Into my mind you have crept 
Entangling everything I once knew

As I look to the surface in hope 
My eyes see a shimmering sight
Into my abyss I go, how does one cope? 
You used to be my sizzling light 

There are sharks and all sorts of leviathans 
They encircle me as if welcoming me in 
The weight of my guilt matched along with the ocean 
It is at this moment that I wish to repent my sins 

Is this how it was always supposed to be? 
With all of these rocks and creatures, still I am lonely 
I am not dead but I cannot breathe 
I am The Man at the Bottom of The Sea 

 

© 2015 Colton Warr


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dan
Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

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Colton Warr

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Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothin.. read more



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damn the emotion , i love it so intense
well written


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Colton Warr

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you love it! I appreciate the kind words and I appreciate you giving thi.. read more
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Colton, The depth and scope of your imagery really brings this piece to life...then the emotional kick is delivered and we all realize how precious lives (and love) really is. Survivors' guilt is arguably one of the most potent types of grieving, the guilt weighing down rational thought and pushing the emotional aspect to the fore. This is such a great write, Colton, but I've come to expect nothing BUT the best from your pen. Thank you for sharing this with all of us! take care...dan

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Dan, I know I've told you this before, but your reviews are so inspirational and encouraging! Nothin.. read more
Brilliant write... very emotional....good work Colton

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! Thanks for giving this one a read!
Lots of imagery as love is maybe lost and maybe not in the first. The second is more dispar and trying to survive. Very beautiful words.

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Willard! I'm happy you enjoyed this one! Thank you for the kind words and thank.. read more
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The man at the bottom of the sea drowned in her love
Tangled in her hair
And loving every second
Suffocating for air
Lost in the world deep below

I love it

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Yes! I'm happy that you enjoyed this one and felt it the way you did! Thank you for reading!
Very well done my friend:) rating this one 100#

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I do appreciate your encouragement and support! Thanks for giving this.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.
This is an emotional piece but a beautiful one my friend. I enjoyed reading it and glad you sent a RR for this one. Great write :)

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Aaron! I'm glad you like this one! I appreciate you giving it a read and sendin.. read more
Poem #1 The note in the bottle does not seem to ask any questions or deal with anything of any import. The question are rather silly if you are wanting my opinion of the dialogue. The poem, I found to be well written but, the content of little substance.
Poem #2 I found this to be the better of the two poems. This one spoke to a possibility of an adventure to be had and enjoyed.
I enjoyed reviewing your work.

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, I appreciate the review.
A beautiful analogy!!!!!!

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Marcus! I'm happy you enjoyed this one! Thank you for the positivity and thank yo.. read more
marcus

5 Years Ago

My pleasure, you're a good writer!
Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

I appreciate you saying that, Marcus, I really do! Thank you for these positive vibes and thank you .. read more
colton this is a great write my friend

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Colton Warr

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm happy that you liked it! I always appreciate you reading and giv.. read more

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Tags: Love, Hate, A Note in a Bottle, The Sea, Waves, Ocean, Relationship, Guilt, Regret, Bottom, Poetry, Life, Memory, Romance, Hope, Desperation

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Colton Warr
Colton Warr

Richmond, VA



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