To Paris, With Love

To Paris, With Love

A Poem by Colton Warr
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A dedication to the people of France. My prayers and heart are with each and everyone of you.

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To Paris, With Love 

A Poem by Colton Warr


They came with an attack from the shadows

Cowardly and unjust

Innocent bodies became a new home to their ammo

As viewers around the world looked on in disgust 


What we saw were not just raw images

Chaos and blood 

Our hearts are with you, no matter the distance

Let the response of the world overwhelm like a flood 


But people of France, now hear this

Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city

Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty

Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee


To the citizens of America, let us not forget 

Our brothers in arms died together not only in the colonies

But in Africa, Spain, Italy and Paree 

Now is the time to set the hounds free 


And to the humans of earth, you must not repent

For our sins are not sins, our vengeance will be just

Like lightning following thunder our enemies will soon be dust

I’m begging for a worldwide effort, I plead, we must 


So to the people of Paris, I urge your hearts

Sing your national anthem loud and gather in your streets 

For I am there with you as we declare that we are far from weak

It is clear, now, that we must all fight for peace  

© 2015 Colton Warr


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What a beautiful and heartfelt message for the people of France. I can tell you really feel an international solidarity.

"But people of France, now hear this
Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city
Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty"

That part was AWESOME.

"Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee."

And that line falls flat. Because of the word "committee." Committees aren't exciting. No one is like, "The committee is here! We're saved!"

Maybe instead, "As we, one world, stand in solidarity."

I don't know. Just not committee. Also, I would say "furious and gritty" instead of furiously and gritty. They're both adjectives that way.

I also wouldn't spell Paris like "Paree." The French way to say it is the write way to say it, and the French way to spell it is the right way to Spell it.

Overall, I think the verses can be made shorter and more concise and would sound more powerful to the reader that way.


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this is beautifully written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the encouraging words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece .. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
This was beautiful,friend. Thank you for shedding some light on this terrorizing thing. Prayers out to Paris!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words, my friend! We must all pray and we must all come together as one to st.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
McBear

8 Years Ago

Ah. That is no problem! :) I am glad you liked my reply
A beautiful piece, thank you for sharing:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Tee! I appreciate your sweet words! I'm glad you enjoyed this one and support the.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
Prayers for Paris, truly saddening and tragic what's going on. My heart goes out to Paris. Very sweet of you to write something for them :).

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words, Demii! I appreciate you sharing those thoughts here. Indeed, prayers f.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
Demii

8 Years Ago

You're more then welcome :).
"For I am there with you as we declare that we are far from weak"
gave me goosebumps

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great piece buddy! Well written.


Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Kieran! I appreciate your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thanks f.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
Wow this is truly amazing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate your kind remarks. I'm glad you enjoyed this one and th.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
I really like the second to last stanza. This is all well written and written like a work of art on such a current event.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Rebecca! Your words are too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and the message.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
Well written, well conveyed and direct,
Its one of the black days in human history,, hope for a peaceful world

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate the kind and encouraging words. You are correct, a truly .. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!
This poem is a work of art. Your sentiment is almost tangible, and I'm sure Paris can feel it. I hope this is spread all over the world. Thank you for your beautiful words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, my friend! I am humbled and honored by your remarks towards this piece. Thank y.. read more
Colton Warr

8 Years Ago

I apologize for the late response!

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Added on November 15, 2015
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Colton Warr
Colton Warr

Morgantown, WV



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