To Paris, With Love

To Paris, With Love

A Poem by Colton Warr
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A dedication to the people of France. My prayers and heart are with each and everyone of you.

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To Paris, With Love 

A Poem by Colton Warr


They came with an attack from the shadows

Cowardly and unjust

Innocent bodies became a new home to their ammo

As viewers around the world looked on in disgust 


What we saw were not just raw images

Chaos and blood 

Our hearts are with you, no matter the distance

Let the response of the world overwhelm like a flood 


But people of France, now hear this

Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city

Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty

Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee


To the citizens of America, let us not forget 

Our brothers in arms died together not only in the colonies

But in Africa, Spain, Italy and Paree 

Now is the time to set the hounds free 


And to the humans of earth, you must not repent

For our sins are not sins, our vengeance will be just

Like lightning following thunder our enemies will soon be dust

I’m begging for a worldwide effort, I plead, we must 


So to the people of Paris, I urge your hearts

Sing your national anthem loud and gather in your streets 

For I am there with you as we declare that we are far from weak

It is clear, now, that we must all fight for peace  

© 2015 Colton Warr


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What a beautiful and heartfelt message for the people of France. I can tell you really feel an international solidarity.

"But people of France, now hear this
Let the prayers of earth become the smoke above your city
Let our retaliation be known, furiously and gritty"

That part was AWESOME.

"Let the nations of one world stand together as a committee."

And that line falls flat. Because of the word "committee." Committees aren't exciting. No one is like, "The committee is here! We're saved!"

Maybe instead, "As we, one world, stand in solidarity."

I don't know. Just not committee. Also, I would say "furious and gritty" instead of furiously and gritty. They're both adjectives that way.

I also wouldn't spell Paris like "Paree." The French way to say it is the write way to say it, and the French way to spell it is the right way to Spell it.

Overall, I think the verses can be made shorter and more concise and would sound more powerful to the reader that way.


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This is beautifully written Colton,
My heart is for Paris and I hope Isis will be taken to justice,
Plus we have anonymous on our side
Your friend,
Shadowkai

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, my friend! I appreciate your kind words here. They are indeed on our side but we .. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for the late response!
Nice write Colton........... Y don't people understand..their greed, anger and hate in the name of anything and everything....is the only thing that eating up this world.... :(

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Archana, your words are the exact truth. These individuals have been brainwashed and warped into bel.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for the late response!
This truly is a beautiful poem, And I agree with everything you mentioned in it. We do need to fight for peace, To cleanse the world of the people who wish to destroy the fragile system that holds us all together. Great job!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Mar-Mar! I appreciate your kind and encouraging words. I'm glad you enjoyed this .. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for the late response!
This poem was genuinely chilling. Lots of oversight and insight as well. I want to write you more, but am on my way out.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Wesley! I am humbled by your kind and encouraging words. I'm glad you enjoyed t.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for my late response!
well written for days of uncertainty are on all of us and thoughts go out to those who are suffering with loss and injuries. Terrible waste!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind thoughts, Andrew! Days of uncertainty are very much upon us. I agree. We must al.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I am sorry for the late response!
andrew mitchell

4 Years Ago

no prob............
Unfortunate that we live in a world where religion has become synonymous with killings rather than peace... wonder whom they want to rule... dead bodies? Due to some b******s the whole community suffers... they should realize that they are not doing any good to their religion.. they are making it tough for the innocents to survive.....

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

My friend, your words are beyond truth. And I couldn't agree more with them. We must all come togeth.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for the late response!
Anurag

4 Years Ago

no issues...you are welcome :)
A subject that evokes emotions pure, this is very well written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Leslie! I'm glad you could feel the emotion in both this piece and yourself whe.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And my apologies for the late response!
I thought this was absolutely, utterly perfect for my very own reasons. I mean, this was just so touching on many different levels, I'm a writer and nearly speechless.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Than you so very much, my dear! Your words are humbling and encouraging. I appreciate the kind revie.. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And I apologize for how long it took me to reply!
Great poem carrying a very powerful message in light of the tragic events that occurred in Oaris. I very much like the structure of the poem, and how you easliy covey your message and personal emotions whilst calling the world to arms over cowardly attacks like this. This poem is very engaging and well written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Alexandra! I appreciate your kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and its .. read more
Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

And forgive me for how long it took me to reply!
Interesting. well, i give my prayers and love to them from Africa. Although war over anything resulted in only a change in tactics and destruction. Your intentions a good although the element of vengeance for me (in this line " our vengeance will be just") has never been something to be sought. despite that, this poem is utmost beauty, a lotus blooming and standing victorious in the garden of poetry that deserves the views of the world. this is definitely a winning piece in anyone's heart. Do keep writing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Colton Warr

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Sam! Forgive me for taking so long to get back with you. I appreciate you sharing.. read more
PHFASCES

4 Years Ago

Its a pleasure. The world should start becoming one large community instead of the division we face

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Richmond, VA



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