A Night Rainbow, The Moonbow

Waiting for Love

Night’s Rainbow, The MoonBow

A rainbow glistened in a dark sky

Spreading through starlight

Thunder roared as lonely clouds

Ripped into the atmosphere

Upon my wave of hopefulness

I search for you my dear

 

Miraculous Lights twinkle

Gleaming brilliant colors flow

Into my pleading heart and soul

I’ll wait forever, never to let go

Many years and many days

But nothing changed your plane

 

I danced for sweet rain to bring

You near, for the rare Moon’s

Bow to appear �" now I see

It’s half ring hidden in my memory

 

A hundred different ways to collide

With my propensity to laugh and cry

Waiting for drops to take my pain

Pretending my meek measures would

Make you smile, but life’s too short

For lonely clouds these parched days

 

Longing I asked the moon to come down low,

But the hellcats of hullabaloo said “oh no no”

You need only a mist to see his rainbow

Tenderly embrace our dark paradise

It calls for love’s blissful guise

Author's Note

Moonbow rises at night, rarity: Just thoughts...Thanks in advance for reading/any reviews guidance are always appreciated. I made changes....like this version better. Hope you do...A Moonbow is a rare phenomenon

Reviews

[armin]

Rainbow produced by the reflection of the moonlight, Moonbow, certainly a rare but must be a beautiful natural phenomenon.
Loved your imagery, the first 10 lines are my favourite, especially the given part is more than beautiful,

Thunder roared as lonely clouds
Ripped into the atmosphere
Upon my wave of hopefulness
I search for you my dear.

Well done, dear Dale.

armin. ...

[The Archon]

The atmosphere created by the imagery of darkness and beauty( night sky, and moonbow) and then simply the idea of embracing the "dark paradise", work very well to show the fluctuating human emotions we experience in longing for someone. Often those feelings are complex and shine a myriad of colors as does a rainbow, or in this case, the moonbow. Your poem beautifully manifest this aspect of humanity. Thank you.

[~]

Ahhh, this write has so much beauty in it. The imagery splendidly displays in front of my eyes.
Love that title and the write was such a treasure to find.
:D

[guy drori]

The moment I began reading there was a tone of mystery and darkness... as you described the lonely clouds and the dark sky. Your enjabments gave the poem a very nice flow. On one hand, the meaning of the words were quite tangled in each other, sending yet again a tone of mysetery, while at the same time being very straight forward. it's not easy to combine the two, and you did so very well. The description that captured me most was "Dark Paradise." (Which is like saying sweet agony.)
I am very glad I read this, and thank you for sharing :)

[Confuser]

guy drori: thanks for reading; when you write words were quite tangled, I'm sure you're correct; I'm always shocked if I write anything readable. You're so very kind!!! Dale

[guy drori]

You're welcome... it was my pleasure reading :)

[Confuser]

Thanks....but You're welcome....Dale

[Cly Young]

I'll be honest, I am not very good at understanding poetry half the time. Sad, I know. However, you used beautiful verb-age and provided excellent imagery with this. I have never seen or heard of a moon-bow before, but now my interest is peaked!

[SpitfireGrrrl]

I really like the emphasis on the last line in every verse - two lovely reads in one! I like the rhythm as well - after reading it to myself a couple of different times, the tone of piece changes fluidly with the one used while speaking. Thanks for sharing!!

[....................]

great metaphor for love... a rarity but so spectacular when you find it... and the sadness of a half-ring, waiting for its counterpart to complete it... there is so much wonderful imagery here... this is beautiful writing... simply beautiful!

[AaronFreitas]

Very interesting I had never heard of moonbow before and when I looked up pictures it was absolutely beautiful. I loved your words... holding onto hope expressed perfectly. I enjoyed it my friend :)

[Stephen]

I really enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing

[Sami Khalil]

Waiting for the embrace, the blissful guises of romance, the measured meekness of two hearts. What a soothing, serene and mesmerizing poem...:)..................

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

It was really a rainbow night I felt, while reading your lines. Great work friend I enjoyed.
Hope I could see the Moonbow though.....

"Tenderly embrace our dark paradise
It calls for love’s blissful guise"