A Night Rainbow, The Moonbow

Waiting for Love

Night’s Rainbow, The MoonBow

A rainbow glistened in a dark sky

Spreading through starlight

Thunder roared as lonely clouds

Ripped into the atmosphere

Upon my wave of hopefulness

I search for you my dear

 

Miraculous Lights twinkle

Gleaming brilliant colors flow

Into my pleading heart and soul

I’ll wait forever, never to let go

Many years and many days

But nothing changed your plane

 

I danced for sweet rain to bring

You near, for the rare Moon’s

Bow to appear �" now I see

It’s half ring hidden in my memory

 

A hundred different ways to collide

With my propensity to laugh and cry

Waiting for drops to take my pain

Pretending my meek measures would

Make you smile, but life’s too short

For lonely clouds these parched days

 

Longing I asked the moon to come down low,

But the hellcats of hullabaloo said “oh no no”

You need only a mist to see his rainbow

Tenderly embrace our dark paradise

It calls for love’s blissful guise

Author's Note

Moonbow rises at night, rarity: Just thoughts...Thanks in advance for reading/any reviews guidance are always appreciated. I made changes....like this version better. Hope you do...A Moonbow is a rare phenomenon

Reviews

[armin]

Rainbow produced by the reflection of the moonlight, Moonbow, certainly a rare but must be a beautiful natural phenomenon.
Loved your imagery, the first 10 lines are my favourite, especially the given part is more than beautiful,

Thunder roared as lonely clouds
Ripped into the atmosphere
Upon my wave of hopefulness
I search for you my dear.

Well done, dear Dale.

armin. ...

[Cole Son]

very nice. I enjoyed it :) Cole Son

[Kami Grace]

I actually looked up in wikipedia about a moonbow. It is indeed a very mysterious yet beautiful phenomenon. The words painted the whole scene out wonderfully, and in between flowed the emotions.

"You need only a mist to see his rainbow" This sentence is truly amazing, combining both the natural phenomenon and the feelings of love within. Thank you very much for sharing, Dale. It is a beautiful piece and made me learn something! :)

Kami

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Hmmm! This poem is highly articulated with deep meaning and diffrent interpretation. There something romance with nature your poetry speaks metaphorically. Well done, Mrs. Confuser.

[MsJewel]

The images you have created are stunning in this poem of love and longing. I'm drawn in by the softness of your words, the gentle emotion shared. So soft and lovely Dale.

:) Julie

[Confuser]

Julie you're so sweet, but I just changed the entire poem; don't even know why I posted it....sucked eggs...some of the smell's gone

[MsJewel]

It is even more beautiful the second time around! :) Julie

[Confuser]

You're so kind Julie: Can't wait to buy your collection of scribbles, what a ridiculous thing to say, LOL. You are so talented girl.

[SuspectGray]

I'm reminded of the Rolling Stones "You don't always get what you want, but sometimes you get what you need"...... just a mist is all you need

[Confuser]

SuspectGray; you're right, so I changed the entire poem, (almost...little closer to what I want now)

[R Smith]

hi Dale, i've seen a moon halo and that's beautiful, a moonbow would be fantastic, your poem reflects that fantastic moonbow, a gorgeous romantic rendition of thoughts and wishes mixed into your unique style, its a piece of moonglow that makes the moon bow of your dreams :)

[Confuser]

You're sweet Richard: I changed the poem, hated it...thanks though, this is better...I'll be sure next time....Impulse control....sorry

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful flow of thoughts taking the reader to good places and thoughts.
"Longing I asked the moon to come down low,
But the hellcats of hullabaloo said “oh no no”
You need only a mist to see his rainbow
Tenderly glisten the darkest sky"
The sky can bewitch us. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Confuser]

You're sweet; Coyote I wasn't satisfied so I changed it....

[dan]

Dale, Moonbow? Is that used in nighttime archery? (kidding...) It's actually a very interesting concept, a very creative idea. Rainbows during the day, why NOT a Moonbow at night? The wordplay and phrasing in the rest of the write is spellbinding, magical tenderness seeping from each separate clip. So well written, with a mystical quality to it, much like Stevie Nicks' "Rhiannon." Beautifully penned! take care...dan

[Confuser]

Dan: I promise, I thought about your butterfly poem when I posted this..and thought, let's throw in those hellcats, let him figure it out; LOL. I need to clarify: A MOONBOW is a real phenomenom...Just suggested to Rudi to write about it....he could do it justice, you could too. Haven't listen to Stevie lately, yesterday wanted to hear Annie Lenox, get my Scottish groove on, but time...thanks so much for reading.

[dan]

Annie Lennox, IMHO, has one of the most beautiful female voices in pop music history. Just for the fun of it you should go to You Tube and listen to her singing "Winter Wonderland." It's either under her name or the Eurhythmics. Absolutely STUNNING vocal clarity, like a bell. Have a good one...dan

[Confuser]

I will....thanks.....

[dan]

And I DID look up Moonbow on Bing, read about them and saw photos. Thank you for the astronomy lesson! take care...dan

[Confuser]

I completely changed it...hated it...so you thought I was trippin? Hehehe....Thanks Dan, you're always so kind.

[Workvio]

A softly warm and romantic piece of your heart penned to page, for what is it that spawns romance more than a moonlit night with stars dancing in the sky? ...

[Confuser]

You're too sweet, I hated it, so I changed it...Impulse Control Now in tact...

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Strange but beautiful title, so is the poem too, Dale. I love it, every word of it. Well done. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

A Moonbow is a real phenomenom: Look it up....I'll bet you could write something amazing around it!!! Is the poem strange? If so, I tried, maybe need to put more time into it...you are just so talented.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

No, it's just all right and now that I have seen pictures of it, I understand it even better. Never have seen one here in Belgium. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

Rudi: changed the entire poem, almost, I hated it...sorry: Dale

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Don't be sorry, a poem sometimes has to ripen, you only can see that it have to change if you first write it down, first impressions and thoughts. Then you have to knead it like dough or mold it like clay till it's in the shape you like. Sometimes it's such a process. I don't know if you are happy with it now, in this form; I think it's deeper, more written from a personal view. I even like it more. Well done. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

Rudi: You are so very kind to re-read and cannot thank you enough. You cannot know how much that means coming from the most talented non-published poet I have ever read. How I wish you had a collection now, I would buy it for my daughter immediately. I have read your work and Zaisha's poetry to her, and she loves it. I just read a story from Mr. Dakir (think his first name) and it was like reading poetry in a story. So romantic and beautiful. Thank you Rudi. Have a great weekend. Thanks also for the encouragement. I do like it better; I can and don't exspect to ever compare with so many talented writers, but that's okay. I just love to try and READ!!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure, Dale. Have a fine weekend. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

You too....thanks again. Got to bake a cake, my husband's birthday!! So happy he's here; nobody perfect, but he has a wonderful heart. Take care.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Dale, mmm, cake. My wife had made one this week: rhubarb cake with calvados. I'm a grand admirer of persons with the capabilities in the magic of the kitchen. :) Rudi

[Confuser]

That's sounds fantastic. Unfortunately, but good for my waistline, my husband son, only enjoy simple: white or yellow, glaze, no fruit cream cheese, but I have made a few, I love and brought to family. Rudi, my husband LOVES to cook. He's actually very, very good. His father was the same....I believe I've made a rhubarb cake, but years ago. I use to bake much more. Now with these guys, it's simplicity. Picky...plain. Cooking is an art; you're very lucky your wife enjoys it, and I'm sure she does. Take care....Dale