A Night Rainbow, The Moonbow

A Night Rainbow, The Moonbow

A Poem by Confuser
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Waiting for Love

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Night’s Rainbow, The MoonBow

A rainbow glistened in a dark sky

Spreading through starlight

Thunder roared as lonely clouds

Ripped into the atmosphere

Upon my wave of hopefulness

I search for you my dear

 

Miraculous Lights twinkle

Gleaming brilliant colors flow

Into my pleading heart and soul

I’ll wait forever, never to let go

Many years and many days

But nothing changed your plane

 

I danced for sweet rain to bring

You near, for the rare Moon’s

Bow to appear �" now I see

It’s half ring hidden in my memory

 

A hundred different ways to collide

With my propensity to laugh and cry

Waiting for drops to take my pain

Pretending my meek measures would

Make you smile, but life’s too short

For lonely clouds these parched days

 

Longing I asked the moon to come down low,

But the hellcats of hullabaloo said “oh no no”

You need only a mist to see his rainbow

Tenderly embrace our dark paradise

It calls for love’s blissful guise

© 2015 Confuser


Author's Note

Confuser
Moonbow rises at night, rarity: Just thoughts...Thanks in advance for reading/any reviews guidance are always appreciated. I made changes....like this version better. Hope you do...A Moonbow is a rare phenomenon

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Rainbow produced by the reflection of the moonlight, Moonbow, certainly a rare but must be a beautiful natural phenomenon.
Loved your imagery, the first 10 lines are my favourite, especially the given part is more than beautiful,

Thunder roared as lonely clouds
Ripped into the atmosphere
Upon my wave of hopefulness
I search for you my dear.

Well done, dear Dale.

armin. ...

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I actually looked up in wikipedia about a moonbow. It is indeed a very mysterious yet beautiful phenomenon. The words painted the whole scene out wonderfully, and in between flowed the emotions.

"You need only a mist to see his rainbow" This sentence is truly amazing, combining both the natural phenomenon and the feelings of love within. Thank you very much for sharing, Dale. It is a beautiful piece and made me learn something! :)

Kami

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hmmm! This poem is highly articulated with deep meaning and diffrent interpretation. There something romance with nature your poetry speaks metaphorically. Well done, Mrs. Confuser.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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The images you have created are stunning in this poem of love and longing. I'm drawn in by the softness of your words, the gentle emotion shared. So soft and lovely Dale.

:) Julie

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Confuser

6 Years Ago

Julie you're so sweet, but I just changed the entire poem; don't even know why I posted it....sucked.. read more
MsJewel

6 Years Ago

It is even more beautiful the second time around! :) Julie
Confuser

6 Years Ago

You're so kind Julie: Can't wait to buy your collection of scribbles, what a ridiculous thing to sa.. read more
I'm reminded of the Rolling Stones "You don't always get what you want, but sometimes you get what you need"...... just a mist is all you need

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Confuser

6 Years Ago

SuspectGray; you're right, so I changed the entire poem, (almost...little closer to what I want now)
hi Dale, i've seen a moon halo and that's beautiful, a moonbow would be fantastic, your poem reflects that fantastic moonbow, a gorgeous romantic rendition of thoughts and wishes mixed into your unique style, its a piece of moonglow that makes the moon bow of your dreams :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Confuser

6 Years Ago

You're sweet Richard: I changed the poem, hated it...thanks though, this is better...I'll be sure ne.. read more
Beautiful flow of thoughts taking the reader to good places and thoughts.
"Longing I asked the moon to come down low,
But the hellcats of hullabaloo said “oh no no”
You need only a mist to see his rainbow
Tenderly glisten the darkest sky"
The sky can bewitch us. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote




Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Confuser

6 Years Ago

You're sweet; Coyote I wasn't satisfied so I changed it....
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dan
Dale, Moonbow? Is that used in nighttime archery? (kidding...) It's actually a very interesting concept, a very creative idea. Rainbows during the day, why NOT a Moonbow at night? The wordplay and phrasing in the rest of the write is spellbinding, magical tenderness seeping from each separate clip. So well written, with a mystical quality to it, much like Stevie Nicks' "Rhiannon." Beautifully penned! take care...dan

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Confuser

6 Years Ago

I will....thanks.....
dan

6 Years Ago

And I DID look up Moonbow on Bing, read about them and saw photos. Thank you for the astronomy lesso.. read more
Confuser

6 Years Ago

I completely changed it...hated it...so you thought I was trippin? Hehehe....Thanks Dan, you're alw.. read more
A softly warm and romantic piece of your heart penned to page, for what is it that spawns romance more than a moonlit night with stars dancing in the sky? ...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Confuser

6 Years Ago

You're too sweet, I hated it, so I changed it...Impulse Control Now in tact...
Strange but beautiful title, so is the poem too, Dale. I love it, every word of it. Well done. :) Rudi

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Confuser

6 Years Ago

You too....thanks again. Got to bake a cake, my husband's birthday!! So happy he's here; nobody per.. read more
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Dale, mmm, cake. My wife had made one this week: rhubarb cake with calvados. I'm a grand .. read more
Confuser

6 Years Ago

That's sounds fantastic. Unfortunately, but good for my waistline, my husband son, only enjoy simpl.. read more
I wasn't even aware of a moonbow. What sight that would be and now I know why you have waited so long for one as I would do the same. Hullabaloo, great word choice in that stanza. I enjoyed this piece Dale and if this didn't take you a week to write this, kudos to you. Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Confuser

6 Years Ago

It took 15 minutes and I hated it, so I changed it; never did that; probably needed to, but I like i.. read more

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Tags: lonely, love, longing, hoping for change, waiting, mystery, witches

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Confuser
Confuser

Manning, SC



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